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Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Time For a Vacation"

A homeless man sees more than people realize.

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yes I have a suggestion...slow down...I don't know how I forget to review this...I never have before...must have read it and got up to do something and forgot...Bard is free!!!get your motor running...LOL...now I must move on...next...LUFF Ya Linda xxoo


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Mikey, spacing here:
As the chopper lifted off, Harpster's terror became academic. It was time to "tell your dreams to me,****
fantasy will set you free". (Yeah, Steppenwolf!)

Great irony in the humor throughout.

Interesting thought: To be the assailant unable to escape one's own foulness left permanent scars on the heart.

What a wild and wooly adventure. Reminds me a little of the line in Conair by Cage, "Any other day that might seem unusual" - the flying Corvair. LOL. Solid dialogue. :0 GracieAnn


 Comment Written 01-May-2014

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This is very good my friend. You are doing better and better. Hope I can use some of this in mine if it every gets going.
Some comments and a spag or two...before hop(p)ing on the Metro link
Is this a spag or?? "The is Red Rover from Dover


 Comment Written 01-May-2014

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AT LEAST SHE KNOW HIS WAY OF TALKING AND IS ABLE TO UNDERSTAND THIS AND KEEP UP WITH WHAT IS GOING ON SO THEY CANSSTOP IT


 Comment Written 01-May-2014

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That poem is damn good, an amoeba climbing to the heights but still just as small- really smaller by thinking looking down makes it any bigger. Kind-of puts things in perspective. Please, don't crank up the action making this more of an espionage thriller than a traditional detective story. The best sequences are those between the bard and Tenyaya.


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2014

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This is a great flip. I know Bard was way capable. Great surprise here and will keep readers coming back for more in the strange rich people's crazy alternate universe.


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2014

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That is what i love about your writing you can go from humor to drama in the drop of a hat and make it work. Love the escape and Winston's reaction. Classic. NG


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2014

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This was an interesting chapter, lots of action. Could the detectives set a trap for the Chief and his accomplices to walk into? Maybe, on the pretext that someone knows they are in on the crime and is out to blackmail them. I am sure you will come up with better ideas yourself. Great write as always. Faye


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2014

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This read "professional" to me. I think I could go to any bookstore and find this, and it would be a hit. Its action-packed, humorous, reminiscent for us Boomers, and just mysterious and obtuse enough to keep everybody interested. Very nice job. Keep up this story like this and we'll find ourselves at your book-signings,


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I love the story. The Bard got away with his friend.. The lady detectives know they have escaped. Winston will be sending his men after them. It is a matter of who gets there first. Great work.


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