yes I have a suggestion...slow down...I don't know how I forget to review this...I never have before...must have read it and got up to do something and forgot...Bard is free!!!get your motor running...LOL...now I must move on...next...LUFF Ya Linda xxoo
This is very good my friend. You are doing better and better. Hope I can use some of this in mine if it every gets going.
Some comments and a spag or two...before hop(p)ing on the Metro link
Is this a spag or?? "The is Red Rover from Dover
That poem is damn good, an amoeba climbing to the heights but still just as small- really smaller by thinking looking down makes it any bigger. Kind-of puts things in perspective. Please, don't crank up the action making this more of an espionage thriller than a traditional detective story. The best sequences are those between the bard and Tenyaya.
This was an interesting chapter, lots of action. Could the detectives set a trap for the Chief and his accomplices to walk into? Maybe, on the pretext that someone knows they are in on the crime and is out to blackmail them. I am sure you will come up with better ideas yourself. Great write as always. Faye
This read "professional" to me. I think I could go to any bookstore and find this, and it would be a hit. Its action-packed, humorous, reminiscent for us Boomers, and just mysterious and obtuse enough to keep everybody interested. Very nice job. Keep up this story like this and we'll find ourselves at your book-signings,