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Wine, Women and Longing


A Sonnet

  35 total reviews 
Comment by
GWHARGIS
 
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Very rich and this appealed to many senses. I love the imagery especially how the woman was like a fine wine. Showed how love should be taken slowly and dealt with carefully. Nicely done.


 Comment Written 02-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Thank you so much, GW. I really appreciate it.
Comment by
MagKing
 
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I must say you're one exceptional writer!
I love this piece.
A fine Shakespearean sonnet of love.
I like the metaphors and use of words.
The poem is faultless with its description and rhyming, except for the syllable count; there were some with eleven and most with ten.
Great write!

MagKing


 Comment Written 02-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Hi Mag! Thanks so much for your kind words and great review. Eleven syllables are actually allowable when you end a line with an unstressed syllable. Thanks again!
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Hadria
 
 
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I've been sitting here reading this over and over, trying to think of something unbanal (spell check says I can't say'unbanal') - well I just have - and some lines were flitting around in my belfry, not my lines, alas, Robert Louis Stevenson wrote them; they say what I want to say
"Bright is the ring of words
When the right man rings them,
Fair the fall of words
When the singer sings them.
Still they are caroled and said
On wings they are carried
After the singer is dead
and the maker buried."

and I'm fresh out of sixes, dammit! Hadria
If I could I'd give it two lots of five :)


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 Comment Written 02-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    You're very sweet, my friend, and I truly appreciate your kind words and virtual sixer, as well as sharing that verse. Thank you.

reply by Hadria on 02-May-2014
    Aaaaaaaaaah! I'm not often called sweet! Hugs, Hadria.
Comment by
Njorgensen
 
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This is very well written. It is a unique way of expressing your feelings and I think it's a wonderful approach. I really like this piece.

Njorgensen


 Comment Written 02-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Thank you very much for the great review.
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A heady draught indeed and amusing sustained metaphor. It seems that we should treat our women and our wine with equal respect! Winter has set in here now and I have just taken delivery of a dozen bottles of fine reds from Langhorne Creek, which I shall imbibe with caution and your sonnet in mind, so that I can withstand those "blinding shafts of morning light"!


 Comment Written 01-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Thank you so much, Tony, for your great review. Yes, I've had my share of those mornings, but do tip a glass for me, too.
Comment by
Maureen's Pen
 
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Dear David - You've done a great job on this love sonnet. I never can figure these forms out but enjoy reading them, especially when penned with your skill.
Steamy write and with that wine us ladies may need some ice :)
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen


 Comment Written 01-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Thank you so much, my friend. Nice to be back after a respite, and I hope you're well. I saw a post or something that said you weren't feeling well? Anyway, thank you. Ice up. More to come. ;)

reply by Maureen's Pen on 02-May-2014
    I have MS - it is brutal at times:) I've sold my house and packing to move this weekend is the big day. Bloody exhausting so that may have been part and parcel of ripple.
    Icing up and getting ready for rocket fuel.
    Hugs
    m
Comment by
MAB
 
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Wow very sensual. Makes me want to sharpen up the sword and script another letter of my own. I appreciate you sharing this. Keep up the good work my friend your writing is excellent.


 Comment Written 01-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Thank you very much, SaM-PO. Pick up that pen, my friend.
Comment by
Tatarka2
 
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I just don't feel I can give you another 6 this week - but this poem should really get one. I was looking it over to see which lines I would want to quote as my favorite - but I can't pick. Oh, well - if it's that good, it deserves a 6. I don't know that I would change anything, it seems to be a completely formed and perfect thought in itself, with just enough subtle rhyme, in keeping with the subject matter, and lovely use of alliteration - again, very subtle. I have to give you a 6 for this one.


 Comment Written 01-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Thank you very much, my friend, for your sweet comments and that sixer, which I greatly appreciate it. :)
Comment by
Kenneth Schaal
 
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A perfect classy, and clever sonnet writ in excellent meter and with pristine rhymes--and did I mention, wit? I like that you make the distinction between guzzling and sipping. Six star issue. Kenny


 Comment Written 01-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Thank you very much, Kenny. Most appreciated, for the great review and virtual sixer.
Comment by
vapros
 
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Excellent poetry, David. Your ardent love, expressed as a barrel of wine, works out perfectly in your verse. The lady must be well pleased. Good reading.

Bill


 Comment Written 01-May-2014



reply by the author on 02-May-2014
    Thank you so much, Bill. I appreciate it!
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