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Daddy


In the cold hospital waiting room

  15 total reviews 
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Joan E.
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I have not read your work for a while and am glad to see you're posting again. I found this old contest entry that really communicates sadness well. Thank you for your courage to create and post the poem. Your speaking in the present tense adds to the immediacy of your message, and your analogies to the "deer" and the "white uniforms are quite effective. I hope writing this piece brought you some solace. -Joan


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2016



reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
    Thank you so much for going back and reading this poem. I just posted a chapter one of my new book. Hope you get a chance to read.
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adewpearl
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I am so very very sorry that you had to witness people being so cold and uncaring toward your father. And I'm so sorry he had to go through that in his final hours. This poem has powerful emotional appeal that will resonate with anyone who has ever loved someone who has suffered. Brooke


 Comment Written 05-May-2014



reply by the author on 06-May-2014
    Thank you, Brooke, for this heart-felt review. I really appreciate it.
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Karen B.
 
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The vivid details here are well written and add much to the power of your poem. I'm so sorry to see this was written about your own dad and how he died. Unfortunately, this scenario is not unusual in some facilities. Thanks for sharing your grief in this poem, it is a great entry into the contest.


 Comment Written 05-May-2014



reply by the author on 05-May-2014
    thank you Karen.
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Righteous Riter
 
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Good description that paints a clear picture in my mind and allow me to feel the emotion within the words. This piece reminds me of the passing of my dad. Good story telling and a heart touching message that hold my attention from start to finish.


 Comment Written 05-May-2014



reply by the author on 05-May-2014
    thank you Riter, I'm glad you found a connection.
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Hello there~
Really sorry to hear about your father. It really is sad and absolutely bewildering when some doctors do that. Good Luck with the contest though and God Bless~!


 Comment Written 05-May-2014



reply by the author on 05-May-2014
    thank you Javeria.
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RYME4U
 
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Very well done. There is sadness and deep emotion in each line. This kind of tragedy is hard to deal with.This is so descriptive . You have done an excellent job! Yje illustration is impressive, too.


 Comment Written 05-May-2014



reply by the author on 05-May-2014
    thank you so much.
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Jacqueline M Franklin
 
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Hi

Definitely, SAD! You depict the non-attention to your dad's suffering that happens so much in hospitals. Having spent a gazillion hours in the hospital over a nineteen year period with my dad, I could write a book!!

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax



 Comment Written 05-May-2014



reply by the author on 05-May-2014
    thank you jax.
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good luck in the contest

your chosen words and vivid images allow the reader to see and feel the hurt, pain and anger you felt at the passing of your Father
the hospital just leaving him unattended on the trolley with out caring
you portray this well

good enjambment through your verses to allow flow

strong message

cheers Smoothiecool


 Comment Written 05-May-2014



reply by the author on 05-May-2014
    Thank you so much for this fine review. I really do appreciate it.

reply by Smoothiecool on 05-May-2014
    most welcome..SC
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Wonderful art work for these words written.

When we lose a loved one is a big shock

We can't believe it happened.

We will miss them but we can say hello to them

In heaven hoping one day to see them in heaven.

honey tree


 Comment Written 04-May-2014



reply by the author on 04-May-2014
    Thank you honeytree for stopping by and reading.

reply by honeytree on 06-May-2014
    Loved what you wrote.

    Annie
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yolieday
 
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That was well written. The flow of the poem was awesome and I actually felt I was at the hospital with you. Such saddness can only be expressed through experience, so my deepest condolences. This is a great piece of work.


 Comment Written 04-May-2014



reply by the author on 04-May-2014
    Well, thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for the stars.
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