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300 Nigerian girls are praying for help

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This is extraordinary! No other words to describe. It touches deeply on something that we turn a blind eye on way too often.


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    Thank you to your very generous review.
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There's a quiet powerful roar in this piece that made my heart skip a beat. Talent, focus ,and a deep soul is required to convey something as savages Nigerian girls situation with the poise of a Ballerina. This is what you have achieved. Let's pray for a miracle because they do happen.


 Comment Written 22-May-2014



reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    This one has to happen or every nation that stood up and roared will never be able to retract. Sadly these girls will become the talisman just as Malhala became part of the feminist movement for 3rd world countries where women are generally seen as chattels.

    Loved that combination in your--savage with the poise of a ballerina--what beautiful language!
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This one is beyond outstanding. Using the first person narrative, thrusts the reader into the scene. It is like a virtual reality experience, where one becomes the avatar.


 Comment Written 14-May-2014



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    We have all lived in the shadow of disgust and pain. We should have been the last generation of women to fight this l, but in Nigeria women. girls ate worth nothing--not even to the leaders.
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This is so powerful. You really showed how one of those poor girls must be feeling. To think that their education has come to nothing, because savages have prevented it. How disgusting that the men who abused her left their knife marks on her legs. You show her as a brave spirit. Excellent touch to have her think of winning the math contest, and now she is reduced to an animal awaiting its fate. It is up to people of the Muslim world to take action themselves. When they fail to act when are committing kidnapping and other evils supposedly in the name of Allah, they just make appear that they are on the madmen. What sort of country allows these atrocities to happen? judi


 Comment Written 14-May-2014



reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    Nigeria is currently known as the most corrupt and savage country in the world.

    I so completely agree with you that Muslim voices need to scream their outrage, show the world that ALL Muslims are not savages.

    The world is reacting, and perhaps that acknowledgement is keeping the girls alive--the publicity for their cause.

    Two days ago these 'rebels' released a video in which 137 girls were shown swathed in heavy burka style robes and reading the Quran and pledging their support for Islam.

    Hell I'd have done much, much worse to stay alive. But what happened to the others? The ones who were not in front of the camera?

reply by judiverse on 14-May-2014
    I hope the poor girls can be rescued, but they have already endured so much hardship. They're probably afraid for their lives. judi
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The repeating line creates a haunting vision in the readers mind. From beginning to end you made a tapestry of emotion and brought us to the place where all of our senses were on high alert. Here you created a powerful mood, one of hope losing its grip and slipping away into the darkness. It is hard to review and talk about this without thinking of the present reality. I think if they, the government was truly committed they could be found..Shame on such a government. And shame on us as Americans not knowing when or not to use our special forces for good.


 Comment Written 13-May-2014



reply by the author on 13-May-2014
    Yesterday the rebels released a 17 minute video of the girls dressed in burkas reading the 'Quaran and swearing their allegiance to Islam. Only 137 girls could be counted.

    I'm not so sure that there isn't a lot of behind the scenes efforts going on--I have to believe that.

    This isn't new. Human trafficking is destroying thousands of young girls every year. Never so many, and the world noticed--for the first time.

    Keep your prayers alive with thoughts of these young girls whose only crimes were being born female and wanting an education.
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This really had me choked up, Ingrid, which is not easy to do.

Awesome depiction of depict the horror these poor girls must be feeling. These are unspeakable crimes against humanity.

The last I read of this was in the news this morning. Apparently American aircraft are flying over an area where they think at least some of the girls are being held. Also, the Boko Haram offered to exchange the girls for prisoners and the Nigerian government refused.

I hope people won't let up until these girls are saved.

As time goes on, and other news stories come in, issues like this can be set on the back burner. I see CNN is already devoting a lot more headlines to Donald Sterling than to this subject. I only hope these girls won't be forgotten until they are saved from further agony.

This is the most poignant story I've seen in a long time. Not just on Fanstory, but anywhere.

~ Erik


 Comment Written 13-May-2014



reply by the author on 13-May-2014
    There is a sad irony here, that these girls may become a second generation of martyrs in the battle for female equality. Here in NA we have broken down the walls between the sexes and laws are in place to protect women against domestic and workplace abuse, but in many parts of the world women are still possessions and have no worth except as domestic slaves and sexual release.

    The parliament in Canada was debating the help and the extent of our national support in finding these girls. Yesterday's news showed a video in which the girls (but only 137 of them)were shown wearing a form of a burka, reciting the 'Quaran and denouncing Christianity.

    Yes, the kidnappers will trade the girls for prisoners and we'll see how that plays out. Despite CNN and Fox--pffft! there is still a lot of international conversation and hopefully, the global publicity will seduce the savages to keep the kids alive to enjoy their new-found celebrity status.

    If they can find Osama, then surely a crowd of girls can't be beyond the world's, let alone NA's ability to locate them.


reply by Justin Tyme on 13-May-2014
    Well-said, Ingrid. Your dedication is an inspiration.
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Wow this is so sad and so believable and heartfelt of those dear sweet girls taken and so afraid if they will ever go home and see there families well done


 Comment Written 13-May-2014



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    This may turn out to be a riveting and historical shift in global responsibility to the woman who are abused and devalued. May the girls not turn out to be martyrs.
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Every time I read an article or news report about this horrific story, I just want to scream. How can something like this happen? Why can't they find them? Until the public was finally made away, I don't think anyone was even looking. What a shame for the Nigerian government. They should be shot along with the criminal that took these girls. Your description of what she may be experiencing broke my heart and I found myself crying. I heard yesterday that there is even the possibility that some,if not all may be sold for organ donation. What has the world come to when something like this can even happen??????? Where are these girls???? Will someone PLEASE find them!


 Comment Written 12-May-2014



reply by the author on 12-May-2014
    I'm not so sure the Nigerian government isn't funding the project, thinking of girls as cash crops and yes, I share your outrage and some of the even sadder thoughts.

    There was a newscast showing all the girls praying and swathed, supposedly new converts to Islam. I wonder how many will wear bombs when they are returned. Watch for the death cries, the screaming images that will smear blood on out TV screens.
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I read this yesterday, but didn't have time to review. It hits hard, Ingrid. Where are these girls? I just don't understand how this even happened. These men are nuts, and really should have all been drowned at birth.

Nigeria is one of the most corrupt countries in the world.


Great POV - really brings the issue to the heart of the reader. There' a certain simplicity to the language you've used that adds to this girls plight.

Very well done. As always.


Av


 Comment Written 12-May-2014



reply by the author on 12-May-2014
    How is it they can find Osama, ferretting him out from the catacombs, but no one can find these girls?

    Of course, they're just the poster children for human trafficking, but it the international community can't find them, they're not trying.

reply by Cumbrianlass on 12-May-2014
    It's appalling, the things men do. Boggles the mind.
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You've engaged artistry in skillful abstract truth in this piece.
In a creative way, you've presented figurative language to show gang rape, a beastly destruction of a young life You put a face on abduction from her bed for the heathen pleasure in men's passions.
This creativity puts a message across more pointedly than litigation and court trials.

Don


 Comment Written 12-May-2014



reply by the author on 12-May-2014
    There are thousands out there, prisoners of human trafficking. We owe it to our own moral sense of decency to at least find the girls in Nigeria.
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