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My Name is Saraya


300 Nigerian girls are praying for help

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Comment by
dreamin'
 
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You made me cry, and my heart ached for every mother and child, especially on this, of all days.

Ingrid, you are getting most of allowance of sixes. Your writing moves me, and that speaks volumes.

I found absolutely nothing to critique about this piece.

Debbie


 Comment Written 12-May-2014


reply by the author on 12-May-2014
    I am very humbled by the galaxy of stars--I really am.

    My point in this is to ask why if they can find Osama, how can they NOT find 300 girls?
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Chrisfiore
 
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Hi S.E.

This is a very moving supposition, you captured the essence of this victim of violence so accurately it is heart wrenching. You possess an array of talent that keeps me in wonder and admiration. Let's hope this situation works out well for these poor girls. Chrisfiore


 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014

    I appreciate the galaxy of stars and the sharing of your thoughts.
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GWHARGIS
 
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This whole subject makes me shake with rage. Every morning I hear about these girls and their plight, I get angrier and angrier. The sad thing is, this is just the tip of the iceberg. All over the world young women are being killed, maimed and treated like dirt, because they are female. It breaks my heart and makes me want to see blood. I guess you can figure out you struck a chord.


 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014
    What blows me away is that they could find Osama, but can't find 300 girls?

reply by GWHARGIS on 11-May-2014
    Remember, it's just girls. Bin Laden was a bad man and made better headlines.
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Jumbo J
 
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Hi Ingrid,
I am going to try to contain myself and hopefully keep this a review and not a heated rant. You have brought the face of a possible reality to this ongoing saga with the actual name of one innocent little girls. You injected a very sombre mood into the inevitable trail of evil perpetratored upon such an innocent soul.

This is my question to anyone who wishes to listen... how do several lorries come and snatch this many people with out some prior knowledge that something was amiss? Something is indeed very foul smelling with this abduction... I know the Nigerian government has shown no concern for their children's safety and it wasn't until outside pressure was applied that they even reacted to this atrocity. The rage I feel in my being for this total disrespect for human decency is truly at boiling point... this situation is highlighted by a mass abduction, but the fact is that children and women are kidnapped, sold abused and forced into a hellish life everyday on every continent on this blue planet... where is the public outrage on a daily basis? What, this form of organized crime across the globe too secret or powerful to be dealt with? As a citizen of the world I am appalled our inept governments, lawmakers and enforcement authorities are not doing anywhere enough to stamp out this practice for once and all... are the lives of women and children that insignificant that it just doesn't matter? Another piece of my heart has died... when it comes to war, drug enforcement and so on, billions of dollars are thrown into the wind with little or no return, so the question that needs my answer is who will help the victims of these atrocities? EVIL WILL ALWAYS PREVAIL WHEN GOOD MEN STAND BY AND TAKE NO ACTION!

This is the war every man,woman and child should be fighting... the right to live with a free mind.

Your story was a truly powerful insight into the fate of one of those poor little girls... what kind of a world do we live in where this kind of evil is tolerated?

You rock Ingrid... this just echoed way past the finish of your story.

With our thoughts we create,
the arsenal to stamp out evil,
James xx


 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014
    Oh my friend, how is it they can find Osama but they can't find 300 girls?

    Use the passion to continue the plea and outrage in your essay.

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A powerful supposition, Ingrid. I hope you're wrong. You hope you're wrong. We both know, aside from some details, you're probably right. These are not men, but cowardly animals. They should be exterminated for everyone's benefit. :] Nancy


 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014
    So, then again they may be harvesting organs. Either way, it's a horrible nightmare.
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c_lucas
 
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Through the centuries, females have drawn the short end of the stick. Now, they are being denied the chance to improve their lot. This is very well written.


 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014
    Thanks for the read. Let's pay attention, shall we? We wouldn't let animals be treated with such distain.

reply by c_lucas on 11-May-2014
    You're welcome, SE. Charlie
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Dianemae
 
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You have hit every emotions that we can only think. The poor girls are the ones with the true, deep emotions. I pray they can be saved and then comforted so they won't die in shame. It is not their fault.


 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014
    Ask most victims and they will agree--it's not their fault, but the shame and humiliation will last a lifetime--often short--by choice.
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dennis0530
 
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While this is classified as General Fiction, I know it is based on real facts. Not so long ago, Nigerian schoolgirls were kidnapped by, if I am not mistaken, rebel terrorists. This could be a personal experience of one of them.

As the writer details the ordeal of Saraya, I can feel it like it was a personal narration.


 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014
    It is the real name of one of the girls in captivity.
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Nosha17
 
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Heart-warming story of one of the purported victims. I feel that the government of Nigeria has totally neglected its duty to take care of its people. I have heard they are totally corrupt, and only feel after 4 weeks it is necessary to accept the help of other nations due to their own inability to do the job they were elected to do. Shameful situation. You have used excellent use of language in the narrative and descriptions to convey your message and hopefully, highlight these problems. Faye

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 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014
    The government of Nigeria could care less about the girls and only has paid scant attention because of global pressure. In fact, Nigeria considers 300 people of no concern--men or women. but especially not girls.
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jmdg1954
 
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Dear God, I hope this is fiction but a part of me knows something like this goes on in these underdeveloped countries. These men, savages would be a better term are no better then the lowest form of life. Perpetrating on the innocent.

This is heartbreaking, but with truth. Lets all pray...
John

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 Comment Written 11-May-2014


reply by the author on 11-May-2014
    I am of the belief that prayer is a pacifier when all forms of action have been exhausted. Yes, I pray, but first I rage.
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