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The Bard of Bel Air


Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Questions and More Questions"

A homeless man sees more than people realize.

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Mikey, this has a strong dialogue with unfolding motivations and intentions of each player in this drama. Strong used of words with convincing plot weavings. :0 GracieAnn


 Comment Written 16-May-2014


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OH Michael, lions and tigers and Arbys...oh my...well the chief isn't giving up to much...but maybe the doctor...they'll keep trying...and Bard wants to go after Lucy...he really likes her...and Harpster has a helicopter and some land that might get them closer...rolling... rolling... rolling...next...her she comes....LOL...GREAT story...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo


 Comment Written 15-May-2014



reply by the author on 16-May-2014
    Glad you are enjoying! You're almost caught up. I just posted 31 a half hour ago. So, you are more caught up than I am by a mile. Let me know if I miss any of yours. mikey

reply by l.raven on 16-May-2014
    sooooooo enjoying...you are doing great....I know your a busy man...lol
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Looks like I have arrived at the last chapter for now. Good work and very interesting and clandestine intriguing etc etc ....

Just one bit of spag this time
W(-h)e(')re waiting on Lucy.
Hoping you will have a look at the stuff I mentioned as you can.



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reply by the author on 16-May-2014
    Added two more today!!
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Much of story writing is the task of pulling ends together and this does that well, at least a few ends. More will be coming to build a case.


 Comment Written 15-May-2014


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The doctor was paid big time! for that death certificate. Looks like the Chief don't know all that much. Hum, Big Daddy is headed for the Bat Cave. Even got a chopper. Guess, I will find out soon, where it is. You ain't missed a heartbeat. Damn, I'm feeling aftershocks, from California to Ms. The contest heard around the world. Devastation! I'm shaking in me brogans, who's next? LOL! wackster


 Comment Written 14-May-2014


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An insider who cares about the integrity of the L.A police department...hahaha! Well, you live out there so you would know better, but from what I hear, LAPD and integrity don't exactly get along that well. You are not kidding about everything going into motion at once. Did you introduce Patel before? I really miss the simpler days of Tenyaya and the Bard.


 Comment Written 14-May-2014



reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    Ha! So do I!! I wish all the drama would just end and the Bard and Tenaya and Lucy could just hang out and shoot the breeze. Yep, LAPD and integrity aren't a ready mix. There are some good cops here and there. It is fiction after all. Hahaha. Patel is new. Well, I finally got them going into action together. So, I have to try and not introduce any more elements! mikey
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Well written, Mikey, and it held my attention almost the entire time. It could be my monitor, but I found reading your font a bit hard. Not a knock on the writing however. Keep it up!



Curry


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Very well thought out plot and unravelling of it. Your characters are real and your knowledge of police proceedings is great. Great dialogue and characters. Enjoyable write as always. Faye


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I think this is moving along very nicely, at just the right pace. I love the poem in the middle, and the way the Bard speaks in what seems to be nonsense, but also ends up making sense. Keep on with this at exactly this pace; I think you have a very marketable product here.


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Things are coming together. No one knows Harpster is alive. They are putting the pressure on the chief. He was a minor actor and mostly after the fact. But his disappearance is going to make the higher up people more nervous. Great work.


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reply by the author on 14-May-2014
    Yes, exactly what I'm aiming for. Trying to get the Bard and his people in place to make a move. Winston doesn't do well when things aren't going as planned. mikey
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