Great chapter mate! Really into this big time. Note my suggestions and spag pickups ok!
and the sun covered its eyes. he he good one
Been thinking this is a good script for a Mel Brooks movie is he still around?
You would make a goo imitation not sure on looks though hehe.
Suggestion in following
I wonder if Junior('s being) ready to skip town will be news to Winston
You did this right here..."Harpster's" ...need to correct same in your Introduction to chapter
well, as long as you're(they're) the one with the biggest wallet".
The(y) waved a search warrant
Are you sure KIEL HALL shouldn't be KEEL HALL?
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