Hi Michael, well Winston's paranoia is running a muck...and the girls (Lucy and Ruby) are just taking it in....both girls are playing it cool...time for things to start happing...a lot ore people now...and growing...Love your story...Moving on...Luff Linda xxoo
Good chapter mate. Glad you are back on board. having a great time with this.
Some possible spags or whatever you think ok!
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I love the little details that elevate this story to the next level. There is always an extra layer of smarts. Perfect depiction of a speed freaks thinking. This shows what a little edge intellectually can do. The girls are just smarter. Great handling of all the complexity. NG
The end is getting closer. Winston is now The doctor is hiding things. Winston is getting hi paranoia in full force. He has learned enough to expect the Chinese to turn on him. He wants to get them first. Luck and Ruby are in the middle of it. Great work.
Very nice touch making ruby turn Winston against the Chinese. And she did it with one sentence, amazing. The doctor's paranoid pills are working a little too well. He's going to end up regretting giving him them. I just love how Winston thinks he's slick and doesn't even see that he's being conned. Excellent chapter as always.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
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