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Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "The Harbor Cruz!"

A homeless man sees more than people realize.

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Mikey, a throwback to the Beatles song and of course the LSD acrostic. This installment was easy to follow and added a new dimension to the story ling now that the authorities are salivating for a kill, LOL. Harpsters possessive with an apostrophe? Good work. :0 GracieAnn


 Comment Written 25-May-2014


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When the bard spoke "normally" for one line as if he could channel Chuck Norris, I knew they were in trouble. But then throw in cinnamon toast and a few one-armed pushups signals all will be well.


 Comment Written 24-May-2014


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Fast moving, action-packed chapter with great dialogue between the co-conspirators. I don't know how you keep track of all the comings and goings. Great write. Faye


 Comment Written 24-May-2014


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Very cool chapter. Love how Lucy and Tenaya read the "secret" signals!

Pasted to my friends: Sorry there was no chapter yesterday, but I had a car accident, hit broadside but not injured (physically) and everything else fell apart after that... all phone service down in my area, couldn't reach hubby, heard of Nancy's pneumonia, computer keyboard stopped working, etc, etc.

Then I heard just last night that one of the pups I sold to a friend six years ago, from our first litter, the favorite of all the pups we bred here, so silly, goofy, strangely adorable Dylan got seriously ill and after several days of treatment by the vet, including IVs and tests, etc., he finally started eating and was seeming to get better... then Sally found him dead after his evening nap.

It was the last straw to two days of Hell. Haven't slept much at all, can't stop crying from all the stress and bad news. I'm bleeding from my gut with a colitis attack and can't breathe well... using oxygen fulltime for a while. In other words, I'm a basket case at the moment.

I have obligations to fulfill for a friend here this weekend also. So I may be slow in continuing the story, but I will make it up with extra posts when I can.


 Comment Written 24-May-2014


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I like the boat and harbor scene. Crap! I got the chapters reversed. I thought I was missing something. This looks ship shape to me. Very interesting, fills in the blanks, the void. I get cowlicked at times. This chapter clears up matters. Penned very well. How did I miss this? I'm confounded. Good chapter, enjoyed it very much. Captivates my attention. Love it! master. wackydo


 Comment Written 24-May-2014


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This is good writing and the strategies well worked out. These gals should join the FBI, They're too goo for local police work. Here comes action....


 Comment Written 23-May-2014


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WINSTON ISN'T AS CRAZY AS EVERYONE THINKS,HE IS VERY SMART AND CUNNING THIS HAS KEPT HIM ALIVE ALL THESE YEARS THE DOCTOR THAT SCREWED WITH HIS HEAD NEEEDS TO DIE


 Comment Written 23-May-2014


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Somehow you are managing to keep a lot of front line characters involved without losing pace or plot. I honestly do not see what there would be to cut. It is all working perfectly despite your misgivings i would miss any of these people and the ones not directly involved at the moment. This could be more detailed even and not lose the reader. Each character hopds the stage well. NG


 Comment Written 23-May-2014


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I love the suspense. Everyone is trying to stop each other. They were right to suspect the god Doctor. He should not have used a drug that produces paranoia . It puts the victim in a self defense mode. People will go a lot further when they think the are fighting for their lives. I am rooting for the good guys. Great work.


 Comment Written 23-May-2014


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Gear chapter, tense and riveting. I liked the signals and bards little remarks. He seems like he is focused for the moment, but will it last or will he wig out in the middle of something important? So if Winston doesn't have the stuff with him how will the bard and his group find it? Interesting. Looking forward to the next chapter.


 Comment Written 23-May-2014


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