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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Makes Me"

poems inspired by Psalm 23

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Love your lyrical musings.

Wonderfully penned. Sorry, that I am out of sixes for this one surely deserves to be lit up with them.

Such a marvelous flow.

Hugs, d


 Comment Written 10-Sep-2014



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
    Thank you for such an encouraging review. I appreciate you kind comments, virtual six stars and the virtual hugs, too. Debi.
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Makes me pause to ponder reverently:
As a child of God, how do I see
my own purpose in eternity?

The above were my favorite lines..

I thought tercets only had two rhyming lines per stanza but I see that you have nicely rhymed all three.
Very well written, Buck


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the wonderful review, Buck. When I researched on line I found some tercet poems by Thomas Hardy and Percy Shelly that rhymed all three lines. I liked the rhythm it created so I thought, why not? They are excellent poets to emulate or at least attempt to.

    I am grateful for your kind review. Thank you for the encouragement. Debi

reply by Trybuck on 31-Aug-2014
    Thanks for the information.. I love to rhyme as much as possible..
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w.j., this has perfect meter and solid a-a-a and so forth rhyme in each triplet. The descriptions are vivid with original phrases. Delightful to read. :0 GracieAnn


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the kind comments, GracieAnn. I am pleased you liked it and appreciate the encouragement. Debi.
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Tercets 'Makes Me.' I think that many people question their existence upon this earth. I have for years, wondered what exactly my purpose on earth was. I have not come up with an answer, other that I am here because I am here. A good Tercet poem. Well done.


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the kind comments about the writing and your insights on the topic. I appreciate it. Debi

reply by chasennov on 31-Aug-2014
    You are most welcome, Debi.
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Wonderful poem. Nice visual imagery of nature. Great spirituality as it motivates others to look beyond materialism. Good alliteration scattered like melodic/moisture and bright/blue/birds. Good flow of rhythm in this rhyming tercet suite. Beautiful work.


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    The you for the generous analysis about the writing and your insightful comments about the theme. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi.
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The repeated 'Makes me' is such a strong affirmation that it is indeed these times that we choose to spend in touch with nature that make us - not only what we think but what we are. Your tercets each give us a glimpse of this wonderland you inhabit for a while.


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the kind comments and insights, tfawcus. I appreciate your continued support and encouragement. Debi
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"Makes Me" is romantic with its nature appeals.A structure of six tercets presenting unforced and quite rhythmic rhymes and lines.It appreciates "life", the feeding of "doe and fawns". Then its language speaks of the blue sky as "the cirrus clouds on high".
On a final note, the persona becomes so inspired as to find his "purpose in life". This makes a good read.


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    I am pleased you enjoyed this poem and I appreciate the analysis. Thank you.
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I love poems that rhymes. MAKES ME WONDER AT CASCADING SPRING
THE MELODIC SONG THE WATER SINGS
FOR THE LIFE EACH DROP OF MOISTURE BRINGS.


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the generous six stars, thee-name! I apologize for the delayed response. Work has been crazy and I have not had time to visit the site. I sincerely appreciate your encouraging comments. Thank you!

reply by thee-name on 31-Aug-2014
    THANK YOU!
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Hi Debi,
I loved your detailed portrayal of the wonders of nature that exist around us, everyday. You develop a stirring appreciation of the magical moments that accompany such an eventful encounter. Your meter and rhyme were solid throughout the write, well done.
Isn't it amazing what can transpire on a walk through the woods. (I live in such country...had to chase away two large deer yesterday, that were eyeing my garden, lol.)
Anyway, beautiful work and a pleasure to absorb...
Best wishes, Bill


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the kind wishes, Bill. I appreciate the detailed review. You are lucky to live in such beautiful country. Deer are beautiful, but they can be a nuisance. Thank you for the encouragement. Debi
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Makes me pause to ponder reverently:
As a child of God, how do I see
my own purpose in eternity? .. there's nothing like nature to bring on deep ponderings and awareness of the divine in our lives, isn't it?

I love the repeated refrain of the title - Makes Me - at the commencement of each stanza. It's very effective.

A soothing read - fills me with thankfulness for grace and salvation.

Have a beautiful day, Debi.

Love,

Sonali :)


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
    Hi Sonali
    Thank you for the great review. I sincerely appreciate the thoughtful remarks about the writing and about the theme, and about how it made you feel.
    Have a wonderful evening. Debi
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