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Operation Pied Piper


An evacuee's story of war time events - a Memoir

  35 total reviews 
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EverInParadise
 
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Such an important story. Oddly enough I just posted story called The Train to My future, and though it is completely fiction I tried to honor the many families who went through this difficult time. I hope you will read my entry and let me know what you think. Thank you for telling us of this time in first person. I have no negative comments. I wish I had read you story before I submitted my little effort.


 Comment Written 24-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
    Hi EverinParadise (lucky you LOL) - thank you so much for such a wonderful review and 6 bright stars. Especially appreciated as it goes way back to 2014. Initially I thought the review had been sent by mistake as I did not recognise the title - I had completely forgotten it and had to read the beginning to job my memory. Very kind of you - warm regards Dorothy x
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You mentioned the evacuation in your review of my WWII memoir, so I had to look for your story. Your memory banks apparently hold a lot more than mine. (lol) I hope your uncle jimmy survived the war. Your pineapple chunks brought to mind my mother. (She was from Manchester, and came to the U.S. before WWI.) I remember her telling me about how special it was to get an orange at Christmas.

We both have memories of these terrible times, but, for some reason, I have this peculiar warm (for lack of a better word) sort of feeling when I look back on them. I don't really know how to explain it. Maybe that's my "thirty minutes of fame."


 Comment Written 20-Mar-2016



reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
    Hi Bruce, thank you so much for your generous review - much appreciated, especially on a piece that was written quite a while ago. I can understand your looking back on that time with a kind of warmth. I do also. I think as we get older even the difficult times are looked back on with nostalgia. Warm regards Dorothy
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Your form of writing is relaxing, a down to earth, confident, easy flowing read. I need to learn the art of staying on point and moving along at an even pace. You, however, know to move from one subject to another with grand ease; From start to ended, I was held captive. Your historic memories are a learning experience.
Blaming your aunt, hit home. Adults forget that Children feel emotions just as well, if not more, than adults do and they should always be a part of family discussions and decision making.
A wonderful story: a show and not tell read that moved my heart. This is the technic I want to learn.
I enjoyed your short story very much and looking forward to more.


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2015



reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
    Thank you so much Pudd-n-tain for such a lovely review. Much appreciated and I am glad you enjoyed the read. Not heard from you before - are you new to the site? Warm regards Dorothy x

reply by Pudd-n-tain on 17-Aug-2015
    I was a member in 2007 until a few years ago when I became sick. I'm better now and want to get back on the horse. FS is the best program online. Nice to know you. See you soon.

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
    Hi Pudd-n-tain - glad you are OK now. Look forward to reading your work. Nice to know you too. Stay well - warm regards Dorothy x
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Lady Dorothy Fennell,

Certainly an interesting take from a young child's point of view. Enormous doings with no relation to what would have been normal. In rural Wyoming, thousands of miles from any shore, the people were frantically closing off their windows and doors with blackout curtains. They sold incandescent bulbs, all black except an orange dot on the very end that permitted a glow.

We had no electricity on the farm. Being twenty-five miles from the nearest town and a mile-and-a-half from the closest neighbor, we were astounded to have an air raid warden banging on our door, telling us to turn out our lights. He saw the glow from our kerosene lamp half-a-mile from the road. Didn't we know that Japanese bomber could see a cigarette glow over a mile high in the air? Hard to imagine what they would have bombed even if they did see the light.

It was far different in Los Angeles, California. There, all the lights in the streets and businesses were black. Automobiles ran only with their parking lights or masked headlights leaving only a slit for a sliver of light to see their way. It was more for the pedestrians to see the cars coming than for drivers to avoid collisions. No street signals at intersections either. Major thoroughfares had an officer directing traffic with a flashlight, the lens covered with the ubiquitous red Cellophane held by a rubber band.

One really astonishing thing for a boy of seven was to see men of the US Army Air Force, trainees, having graduated and were being assigned to their squadrons, marched through the streets of the city singing the then, 'Air Force Hymn', as they passed beneath the balcony of our apartment house. This was every morning before daylight in the late spring of 1942 when we had been at war for less than six months.

Most of those war plants are gone now. The sheds where men waited for their buses to ride to their quarters or to work the next day are all gone now, demolished to clear the way for part of a freeway serving the international airport.

If you have not seen a US film with Gregory Peck, entitled, "Twelve O'clock High", you might wish to. The opening and closing scenes are of a veteran of the air war in England again on business shortly after the way. He is seeing the old airfields and remembering the war, the people, and the circumstances.

Nicely done, bringing a time far past to life again.

Fantasist


 Comment Written 15-Mar-2015



reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much Allezw2 for your review and generous 6 stars. Came as a surprise as it was written a while back. Funny the things you remember from times so long ago - but I remember it like it was yesterday, coming out of the cinema to pitch black and winding our way home. But when you have no choice you forgot what it was like to have street lighting and it's just the natural thing to do. War for children held no fear, in fact it was exciting - boys used to go, after a raid, looking for shrapnel. I never understood why they fussed over it so much. It was interesting to hear your story of the American experience of war. The only episode of war in America, that I know about, is Pearl Harbour. I see you have been a member of FS since 2003, but I've not seen any of your work. I did see the film you mention 'Twelve O'clock High' but don't remember it so well. No doubt it will come around on to TV, everything does. Nice to hear from you. Warm regards Dorothy
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Oh, Dorothy this is deserving from beginning to end, a six...And will bestow that upon this story once I get one on Sunday, replacing the five.
I thoroughly enjoyed your true story...It didn't seem that long to me as the events happened quickly to keep me so interested...And, so glad that you made it when you were little through the war & all those horrid events while living in your homeland...I heard stories from my parents, though your country was so much affected & lives lost there, unlike in the US...Except when Pearl Harbor was bombed, & that was the closest for Americans ...Though the depression, was felt world wide, I believe.....I was born in 1951, so, I do so like the read, describing the events the best you knew how...I felt I was there watching the events unfold...And, even though you lost your dad at any early age, your home- life with the rest of your family & friends seemed to help you through so much & know everyone was so happy that the war finally ended....And think that, even helped people get through so much afterwards, as they felt blessed it seemed, surviving through all that terribleness that war did bring.

Caressa


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
    Caressa, thank you so much for such a wonderful review - I am not bothered about 6 stars, you lovely words are reward enough and I am just glad you enjoyed it. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Dorothy, this is a beautifully written memoir of your wartime experiences. Had an interesting experience a few years ago in a writers group when an English writer and a German writer told of their wartime experiences. That they could bear to be in the same room and talk about what they went through as children on opposite sides of the conflict - not very different, really - was extraordinary. :) Nancy


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2014



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
    Thank you Nancy for your very generous review and 6 stars - much appreciated. As you say, German and English wartime experiences pretty much the same, just fruitless and devastating war for everybody. I watched a very good programme on TV recently called 'Our Fathers - Our Mothers' in German with English subtitles - very good and as I watched I started to forget the soldiers were German and found I was sympathising. The German civilians had the added horror of seeing their friends who were German Jews herded up and sent to the gas chambers. It was an excellent film. Nice to hear from you - warm regards Dorothy x
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My parents were both evacuees from London. My Dad went to Torquay and loved it there. He stayed in touch with the family until those parents died. My Mum went to South Wales and hated every second, she ran away back to London and her Mum. That experience had a lasting effect on her all her life. I loved the sweet way you wrote this. It sounded like my Mum talking!


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
    Hi Onebrit - Thank you for your lovely review. So interesting to hear about your Mum and Dad, both evacuated in the war. Your poor Mum hating where she went to in Wales. I thought they tried to keep siblings near each other, but not in your Mum and Dad's case. I think it had an effect on us all, whether we were aware of it or not. How did you end up in Texas? It was great hearing from you (I looked up your profile!) Warm regards Dorothy xx

reply by onebrit on 23-Oct-2014
    Thank you Dorothy. My Mum and Dad were both born in 1930, but didn't meet until they were 15. My Mum and her sister were both together in Wales but with a very strict woman who made them go to chapel 3 times a day. Poor Mum missed London, her parents, friends and family and was dreadfully unhappy. (she also hated chapel which was in Welsh) safe but unhappy. My heart breaks for the 10 year old she was. I married a Yank, we divorced after a 30 year marriage and I just stayed here. I hope to move soon, but will stay here as I am very Americanised. I love reading your work.

reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
    Lovely to hear from you with all your news. How awful for your Mother. We go to Wales - we have a holiday cottage there and the countryside is beautiful, but chapel three times a day, Ugh! These Welsh speaking areas can be quite insular - does not seem right putting children in places like that. I was lucky! What is your name onebit. Dorothy x
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Ric Myworld
 
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Thank you so much for getting carried away and writing your 4,409 word story. It is so well written, and has made me feel as if I was right along beside you throughout every step of your journey. Great job. :-)


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
    Thank you Ric for going to the bother of reading my l o n g memoir. I appreciate your review very much - warm regards Dorothy x
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Mary Ann MCPhedran
 
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a most enjoyable story and someof it sad. I lost my parents at a young age. I have no reason to suggest any changes. Thanks Mary


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
    Thank you Mary Ann for your review - much appreciated. Sorry to hear you lost your parents at a young age. Keep smiling and warm regards Dorothy x
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What a ride.

Other children in the railway carriage were calling to each other " Hey, she's got a can of pineapples", -- Comma after 'other'. Also, check spacing of quotation mark.

no-one -- no one

Whitehaven which was 2 miles away by -- two miles away

I don't remember how long I stayed with Mrs Moir . -- Check spacing of period.

I suppose, mum was not taking any chances. -- No comma. Also, 'Mum'

We went to Sunday School when young then on to Church -- Missing period.


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014



reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
    Thank you so much for your review and drawing my attention to the errors I have made -- much appreciated. Warm regards Dorothy x
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