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A poem, just for the hell of it...

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Yep, I'm with you on that or maybe you forgot to take them? LOL It's a long one. I admire the way you add pictures to illustrate your message Dean..I don't want anything to do with the Devil but I sense he is always near too. Ready to trip us up. Good job! Nancy


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The temptation, the allure of it. Well, if the Devil showed up and told Heaven was real, I'd refuse because then I'd have evidence there is a heaven and Hell.


 Comment Written 10-Nov-2014



reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
    Yeah, and we couldn't have that, now, could we?

    Thanks, JM... :}

reply by JM daSilva on 10-Nov-2014
    Not now. I have to finish the book first.
    hehe

reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
    :}
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Oh my, Dean, other than raised eyebrows over the devil's sweet (nectarous) breath (though I DO relize where you're coming from with that term - decay) I thought this was brilliant!!! (So what else is new? LOL) You never fail to entertain, my friend.


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Satan is like a roaring lion seeking whom he may devour. But the one who lives in the believer is stronger that Satan. He tempted Jesus in the wilderness, so why would he not likewise tempt us? The message of this poem is so good. Blessings, Pat


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Did you have a devilish good time writing this? What a dream that must have been. But good triumphs over evil and rain washes away sins (we hope). Your writing is, as always, sinfully great!


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You're a master storyteller and to do it this way in rhyme makes it even more compelling IMO. So very true of the way "it" operates in the world. I'm glad your hero had the courage to turn away...


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Hi Dean,

What you call a dream, I call a nightmare, lol. You have really captured the struggle between choosing evil or good. I know you're religious from past postings and personal comments and this piece reflects that. However, you do love horror.

Don't know if you've ever seen a shrink, but he'd probably find you challenging, lol. You're a complex dude, Dean, but a very entertaining one.

Hugs,
Lou


 Comment Written 10-Nov-2014



reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
    Nightmares provide me with some of my best ideas, Lou. So, they are both a blessing as well as a curse.

    Nah, I don't need any shrink fumbling and fiddling around inside my skull. I wouldn't want to traumatize anyone else, LOL.

    Thanks for the review. :}
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Hey Dean,
Your meds are fine...I think you need to make some room and sell tickets to the show, lol. Talk about Steven King...this one is a chiller!
I'll bet your pastor loves to interpret these things.
That aside, you did a great job developing the story. Great creepy setting with a thoughtful moral about good and evil, and the results of choice...
Rats, all this rainwater sound is reminding me of the two cups of coffee I just drank, lol....be right back!
Anyway, I enjoyed this one, nice work.
Hope all is well, Bill


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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
    Hah-ha, ya' think, Bill?

    Pastor pride of our church told me not to put too much stock in such dreams. He said that the enemy (his term for Satan) always tries to invade our minds while we are at our weakest. And how much more susceptible can we be than when we're sleeping?

    Thanks so much for the review...
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Excellent poem and sound effects. How do you get those sound effects and pictures to move? COME HERE, MY BOY, JUST HAVE A SEAT
I'LL SHOW YOU SOMETHING REALLY SWEAT


 Comment Written 10-Nov-2014


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The main words that come to mind Dean, is powerful. Powerful enough to leave a sickening pit in my stomach until that veil of rain began to fall like. You truly are an amazing writer. The flow, rhyme, stor line justo seems to flow so naturally for you. A wonderful gift, for sure.

Your presentation was quite clever, but even without the movie part you would get your message across because of the words used - lurking, preying, etc. Myou very favorite line is "pregnant raindrops filled with souls".

I am glad God won in the end, but I am also glad I do not have creepy dreams. :) very well done. It seems I have a difficult time, when I do review, to give you anything less than a six. Hope you pUT some of your work in print, as a lot of the booksame I puchase, the poetry is not half as good. Joyce x


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