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Reign Knee Daze (Rainy Days)


A poem, just for the hell of it...

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What a dream that might have been . This is such an interesting poem. Not extremely dark but intriguing.
This line stood out--with pregnant raindrops, filled with souls,
Excellent aabb rhymes
Good use of alliteration
Great use of enjambment. read flawlessly from line to line.
As usual fantastic presentation


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Oh, you had fun writing this, and you also had visions, broad and black and wonderful. Somehow you've woven your faith betwixt your fascination for the fearsome and flawed, and it delivers a great yarn of truth and light. The cooling rain patching the holes just when the devil nearly made him do it, is a wonderful metaphor for the saving grace of prayer, of love, of God. The sweeping vision of a tortured soul being shown the goodies by old Nick, is told in wonderfully imaginative versifying, and given extra verve via the excellent images on display. I couldn't help but think of Jesus' tour of destiny and the choice he was offered in teh desert. Highly enetertaining and thought provoking.


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Well! A dream or was it a nightmare? What a trip you took with the vile one and I am glad that you have not succumbed to his charms.Yes,he will be there around you lurking ,trying to trap you. Thank God for the refreshing rains.It is like a modern "Pilgrim's Progress"


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This is brilliant. I can't say I enjoyed it but I was intrigued by it.

As a piece of poetry it was superb, its rhyming and meter flawless.

You really are a master of the horror genre


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Hi Dean, Well my friend I think if dreams like this do not hurt you or disturb you when you're awake you should tell the doctors to leave you the hell alone. This is such a fantastic story ... eerie of course but lots of wisdom and truth too. Bravo, we all stand up and cheer! xoxo Kiwi


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Another beautiful Kuch production Dean you definitely have a beautiful flow in your verse. The images are perfect for the context
thanks for sharing and scaring the shit out of everyone

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You might have something there about changing your medication, Dean! LOL. Quite a feat to write such a long and well rhymed poem. Excellent job of illustrating it. Giddy


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I could be what you ate for supper. lol Great rhyme with a story poem that follows the theme of Christ's temptation in the desert. We can resist evil and make right choices.


 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014


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Dean this is quite creative. The rain/storm and images that are in motion remind me of a dream I'm going to have very soon. Very nice flowing tempo, the rain brings you along like dragging leaves down a muddy path of water. Keep writing like this. Oh yeah, Screw the medication change ; )


SAM


 Comment Written 10-Nov-2014


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New word: nectarous Hmmm... had to look that one up! Nice fit!

Love the art work, as usual. :)

'"Oh, is that so?" he bared his fangs,
soon overcome by rueful pangs,
all evil that I'd ever spoken
dangled there like tainted tokens.'

Oh, boy. Ain't it the truth that we all have a lot of "tainted tokens???"

"Sometimes I sense that he's still near,"
lurking, preying upon my fear.
And when that happens, without fail,
God sends the rain, His soothing veil..."

Thank you for "going there." As much as I love your wretchedness and delightful darkness, I appreciate that you kept it in check for this.

I don't know about "screams" but there were some pangs of guilt and uneasy stuff way down inside.

Now, there will be no changing of medications for you! We'll talk to the doctor when your writing starts slipping; therefore, I strongly advise you to not hold your breath! :)



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