Just a passing ship, uh? Good to read you, David, you rogue. You must be leaving a swath of broken hearts across new horizons. At least you didn't forget how to rhyme. I loved the beat and the fast pace of this poem. Good of you to drop by. I enjoyed it.
I love the juxtaposition of color-blind with commitment phobic, (a person who cannot commit). The last stanza speaks well of the point you aim to hammer to your readers. How can you ever break the heart of a woman who happens to want a long term commitment but you just cannot give her that. You have not found yet your one true love, for if you do, you won't ever want to leave her side. I enjoyed your poem, nevertheless.
Glad to find you here again, at least for a Rogue-ish visit!
I will be not so much active here for the next month and then will revert to a standard membership in Dec. But I'll visit on occasion and will always be glad to see works from you! Love all your rich musical phonetics in phrasing (will not note them all, as I know you know I noticed each one and applauded), but I especially liked read the P and S sounds in the first stanza when read aloud, as well as the internal rhyme.
A proper rogue would be remiss
In passing up a farewell kiss
For those he took and then forsook
To hunt for fresher prey.
Love the whimsy here:
This artful dodger struck and ducked,
While those I plucked amassed and clucked
Good closing note too.
Bravo and do visit us more often, please.
PS--Nice that we stay linked on FB, though! Glad of it.
You give lovers everywhere a fresh perspective on not latching on to tightly. Well written.. making a lot of sense for the reader in a situation where we think there is no sense at all! Does that make sense?? I really liked this, I enjoyed reading it.. well deserving of the ribbons that's for sure
This is a very good. I like the declarative style and the straight and non sense honesty of the writer. Some lines jumped at my imagination "But bless your hearts for all the darts/You've aimed and launched my way."
What a wonderful poem for my ears and heart! I am not a poet. I seldom write or read poetry but this one caught my eye so I took it for a test drive.
It was a nice, smooth ride! I am a person who mostly sees gray, but my immediate world is mostly black and white. Those around me know no middle ground. It's love or hate, live or die, black or white, good or bad, right or wrong, etc.
In so many words they tell me they feel compromised in spirit if they compromise in application. I feel bad for them as they cannot see but the fringes of their world ... the extremes but nothing in the middle. And like an Oreo cookie, life has some sweet things to offer in the middle!
Very nicely done. I seldom enjoy reading poetry but you have a new fan of this piece. Best to you ...