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Lost and Found
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Orphan huddles in garbage - found by Santa?
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Comment by | | Premier Author | | | Katharine Folkes | | | Poet Rating
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good first sentence. and good Christmas story.
I have a question, if you don't mind, that struck me right off the bat, though I may be missing something here. IF the mother left him in that orphanage, why did she have to look for him for years?
Also, when she says, "May I sit down, George?" I child would probably say something like, "Sure. How did you find me?"
I hope I didn't offend. These were just two things out of your story that bothered me. It is a good, heart-warming Christmas story.
Katharine - pome lover
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2017 |
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
Good heavens, I had to go back and take a look at my work. So long ago I wrote that. I think she surrendered George and later decided to look for him. No offence taken, it's good to have input into writing. Thanks so much. I have written much since that Lost and Found. Blessings, Kay.
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Comment by | | Sandra S-Mitchell | | | WEST END | | | Poet Rating
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| Hi Kay, I sent you an e-mail, I hope you received it. I think this story is superb and wanted to give it a 6. I will update it on Sunday if I can, because this is a brilliant story and an excellent Christmas story. It is perfect for children, dreams and prayers and letters to Santa do come true, as you story tell us. And I do honestly believe in miracles! Excellent my fried, and good luck in the contest. (It brought tears to my eyes!!!) xsx sandra
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Comment Written 17-Dec-2014 |
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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
Hello Sandra Seagull! Thanks so much for your kind review; moved you to tears? Then, I have done my job. I loved writing it. I had help with re-writing it, from a novelist on site, he thinks I am a talented writer err...I was so chuffed. Lots of Love, Kay :-)XX
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Oh, Kay, just what the doctor ordered after all the grim stuff both on this site and in the media.
A sweet Christmas story. Merry Christmas, dear lady.
God bless you.
Big hugs,
Sonali
George looked into (its) brown eyes... apostrophe not required
Skipping across the high grass, (she sang) a lullaby
thumbs into his thick(hyphen not required here) black belt... how about ... wide black belt?
the reindeers and then finally, (to the) fancy sleigh choc
He was happy (-) he had never met his mother (before) and
the
George (had been) exposed to the elements for a very
she waddled around the bed(,) checking monitors
(the) orphanage tracked me down and told me
and they both cried tears of joy(.) (A)t last mother and son
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2014 |
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
Sonali, I thought you had gone off the radar! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Happy Christmas, Love, Kay :-) XX
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Kay, this is just a beautiful Christmas story. The fact it follows a contest guideline doesn't take anything away from it. So often, they seem contrived to fit the sentence, but I didn't feel that way about this piece. Good luck in the contest, my friend. And the very merriest of Christmases to you!
Love, Bev
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2014 |
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2014
Hello Bev, I actually made a mistake (didn't mean to enter that contest) anyway, got around it and wrote it for children. Thanks so much for reading. Happy Christmas my friend :-) Love, Kay XX
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reply by Writingfundimension on 17-Dec-2014
You're most welcome, Kay. Love and blessings, Bev
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