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2015


Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "tanka (astral light glistens)"

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Comment by
MissMerri
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Ray, this is so beautiful! I'm delighted to see that it has won the first-place ribbon in the Tanka contest. Congratulations!!! I can think of only one reason you win so many contests... you are exceptionally talented. This is a perfect example of your gifts as a poet. Keep up the great work. One day you might paper a wall with all those blue ribbons. . ;p


 Comment Written 12-May-2015



reply by the author on 16-May-2015
    Thanks so much, Adonna, for this very generous review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my tanka. Sue had me take one of my sonnets and convert it into a tanka. This is the end result. 14 lines and 140 syllables condensed down to 5 lines and less than 31 syllables. Sue teaches the tanka is the Japanese version of sonnet. I never understood this until she taught it to me last year. Your very kind compliments humble me and your many bright starts warm the chilly morning skies. Have a great weekend!
    -Ray
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


 Comment Written 12-May-2015



reply by the author on 17-May-2015
    Thanks so very much for this award! I am thrilled.
    Ray
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Glasstruth
 
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Remembering and longing is beautifully represented in rippling waters, and the reflection carries a haunting image of what was. Writing a tanka takes as much effort as any style. I know, I've written a few. Wonderfully written. Les


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    HI, Les,
    Thank you so much for this excellent review and kind comments. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my tanka.
    Ray
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Ideasaregems-Dawn
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I will be amazed if this stunning tanka does not win the contest. Perfectly executed (as always) and simply exquisite imagery. Sadly, I can't rate this poem as it deserves, as I ran out of sixes very quickly this week. (I reviewed a LOT.) But your work is exceptional - I learn from it!

OUTSTANDING********************************!!!


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Good Evening, Dawn
    Thanks so much for this glowing, excellent review. Your very kind comments and wish for a six are greatly appreciated. I, too, ran out of sixes early this week. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my tanka.
    -Ray

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 07-Jan-2015
    Very much my pleasure. :)
Comment by
Kausar_Javeria
 
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Hello there~!
Whoa! This tanka has a very beautiful feel around it. The chosen wording is simply beautiful; it gives off a delicate vibe.
Well done!

JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)

(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks so much for this excellent review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my tanka.
    Ray
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Supe
 
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This is beautifully done. I appreciated all your comments and notes. It helps to understand in this instance, what a tanka is. I enjoyed it and can see so many others did as well. I especially like your last two lines to give it the punch. Good luck in the contest. I look forward to reading more of your work.


 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks so much for this excellent review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my tanka.
    Ray
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Sarah Butterfly
 
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What a lovely read. It stands out for its simplicity and focuses on the beauty of the wording and the image created by it. Very well done!

Kind regards

sarah


 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
    Good Morning, and thank you for this very generous review. Your very kind comments and bright stars are greatly appreciated. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my tanka.
    -Ray
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astral light glistens
on lake's rippling waters
reflections
of you wash over me
as I grasp your fading hand

your words set the scene and mood in this Tanka
poem, Ray --

Margaret


 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
    Good Morning, Margaret
    Thanks so much of this excellent review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my tanka.
    Ray
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lalajovanoski
 
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I very much enjoyed this fine, well composed, inspiring piece,

Well done!
Very captivating!!

Thanks for sharing!!

this is an interesting poem - I had to read it twice to really figure it out. It is full of vivid concrete imagery
best of luck in the contest


 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
    Thanks so much for this excellent review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my tanka.
    Ray
Comment by
Showboat
 
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Oh Ray, that was a 10! Just loved it, and this form of poetry is just exquisite, is it not? I remember when we were publishing Pieces and I really knew nothing about tanka and Sue really helped me out.

Just love this, so much more than a 6!

Hugs,
Gayle


 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
    HI, Gayle
    Thanks so much for this very generous review of my tanka. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. Your kind comments and bright stars have made my morning! Yes indeed, I love the tanka form as much as I do the sonnet form. Both offer wonderful mediums through which to express human emotion. I wish I could have participated in the "Pieces...." book; however, my chromosome make-up prohibited it. Perhaps another time! :)
    Thanks again for a grand review.
    -Ray
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