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Life, Love, and Other Disasters


A collection of poems on these themes

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Crucible
Firstly Steve I love this poem about life and death and love outliving the Reaper's knife, very nice read. This book sounds quite interesting and I wish you well with it.
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
    Thanks, Pearl.

    I had fun rummaging through my back issues and found a few forgotten gems in there... They deserve to see the light of day.
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I like your prologue for your book, I have read some of your poems and have been moved by the way that they engage the imagination. Good luck.


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
    Thanks for the kind words.

    I had fun rummaging through my back issues and found a few forgotten gems in there... They deserve to see the light of day.

    Steve
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I really like this! I love the poem, and the last line is SO true, and I like the idea of the book, best of luck to you, should be awesome!!! Blessings....

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 Comment Written 09-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
    Thanks, IR

    I had fun rummaging through my back issues and found a few forgotten gems in there... They deserve to see the light of day.

    Steve

reply by Irish Rain on 14-Oct-2016
    Best wishes!!!
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very real poem about life... emotional words.
nicely rhythmic. rhymes well The picture goes well with the title.
best wishes for future work.

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 Comment Written 09-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
    Thanks very much for the kind words.

    Steve
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Manifesto of the Machines
An excellent Rondeau Redouble poem Steve and a scary reminder of right where we're heading.
Your repeat lines are perfect and the refrain at the end resonates with the reader to leave a deep and everlasting message.
Mother Nature will take care of things and cleanse herself of the greedy humans whenever she chooses.
I just wish more people realised what a gift life is and how we should appreciate and enjoy it and respect what's around us. It's gonna disappear eventually...but we'll be long gone already.
Wonderful writing, a sound and sobering message.
Sixer for you
Cheers P


 Comment Written 08-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
    Phillippa, thanks so much for the great review and the shiny stars. This one already won me a 50 pond prize in a UK competition, so I guess I know it's got something going for it.

    Yes, this idea of machines becoming so sophisticated that they can start improving on themselves and then that effect snowballing is one that intrigues me. Who's that dude who christened the tipping point 'the singularity'? He's certainly got a few people thinking.

    Steve
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The theme of this poem is that technology is creating a new world order and the perfection of machines supercedes human inadequacies. With the technological advancements it's somewhat scary to ponder the dominance of machinery. The underlying message I get from this poem is the need for humans to make much better decisions as they continue to be stewards of the earth and leaders of their people.


 Comment Written 08-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
    Thanks, Mary.

    It's a little scary that it might already be too late to s tart changing our ways.

    Steve
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A very deep Rondeau redouble Steve about the mess the fickle mind of mankind is making and the precision, power, logic of the machines that man made will one day revolt. Interesting read,
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 08-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
    Thanks, Valda.

    Some scientists are taking this very seriously and see it happening in the not too distant future - perhaps not quite as dramatically as this...

    Steve
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This is a profound and beautiful piece on the end of mankind. The only suggestion I would make is to leave out the last line which has been stated quite a few times within the poem. And the second to last line is a great way to end it!


 Comment Written 07-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016
    Thank you.

    That last line is a requirement of the form, but I take your point.

    Steve
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Manifesto of the Machines
I have to commend poetic machines.
Even if I think your tongue is somewhat lost in you cheek on that point.
Rhyming machines are nothing new to FS, eh?

I love the possibilities here. Can machines out-manage us?
Steve, I don't think so. At least not yet.
And I think that might be your point.

Your machine-poet thinks exactly like a human.
It's arrogant. Sound familiar?

Congratulations on your publication!
I have some catching up to do.

Peace, Lee




 Comment Written 07-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
    Lee, I think Ray Kurzweil predicts 2045 for 'the singularity' his coinage for the tipping point when machines become self-improving, leading to a cascade of unpredictable events. We might just hang around that long, and perhaps smart machines might be a good idea for the old fogeys that we will both be by then!

    Yes, I guess my machine poet may sound a little human - what do you expect when we have had literary robots made in our own image for over a century now?

    The publication in this case was a by-product of getting into the top ten of their contest, so doubly rewarding. Triply, if you consider that they also planted a tree for me (somewhere in Kenya, I believe)

    Thanks fir the review and the stars.

    Steve
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Manifesto of the Machines
So, the creations rebel against the creator
Poor creator if you ask me
but then that is the history of mankind
Of course, mankind is not omnipotent
so it seems only right the creations take over
Could they do any worse than mankind?
Perhaps man did do one thing well, create
something better than himself
There's a strange irony wrapped in that thought
Wonderful Rondeau Redouble, perfect to the form
Love the Hundred Edicts, ten squared (10 ^ to the Appendix Two power)
A clear and worthy winner!


 Comment Written 06-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
    Thanks, rs, for the thoughtful review and the six stars. Much appreciated.

    I like the Hundred Edicts idea too. I wonder what some of them would be....

    Steve
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