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Angel wings


daddy's love for his angel (5-7-5 Senryu)

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Treischel
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What a lovely picture and touching story you related in the author notes. This would be a Senryu rather than a Haiku, but in any case it is well done in this 5-7-5 format. I lve the thought and overall composition.


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the review. What is the difference between an haiku and a Senryu? Explain please/

reply by Treischel on 23-Jan-2015
    A Haiku deals with animals and nature, while a Senryu deals with human emotions and events. Otherwise the follow the same Japanese formats and rules.

reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
    Thnaks I have change it to Sneryu
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It's wonderful to hear stories of people who have overcome their handicaps to lead a productive life and be good parents. What an adorable picture. You certainly get across the feeling of pride. You might consider replacing one of the "angel" words with something else, like "she's daddy's wee cherub." judi


 Comment Written 21-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the review. I admire this father for the wonderful person he is, while he could have been bitter and angry because of his disability, he is no, he is a thankful you man. I love him.

reply by judiverse on 22-Jan-2015
    You're very welcome. He is a great example. judi
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This is by far one of the most beautiful photographs I have ever seen! It really is, and I think it's so great that you shared it with so many. Your words are great too!


 Comment Written 21-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the review.
    The father in this story haiku has muscular dystrophy and never dreamed he would ever marry let alone become a father. He is a special young man and is a teacher. He may soon in the future be confined to a life in a wheelchair
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You captured my attention when I saw the angel wings.
It is perfect for your lovely poem
And daddy looks so proud holding his precious little angle.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie


 Comment Written 21-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
    Thanks miss cookie for the review. I am glad you enjoyed the poem,

reply by misscookie on 23-Jan-2015
    You're very welcome and I did enjoy.
    Have a blessed week end.
    Until next time, Cookie
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Hello there...-smile- on angel wings do Fathers fall... in love....where rare beauty keeps forever company. wonderful write...love michael


 Comment Written 21-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
    Thanks Michael for the nice review. The father of this baby has muscular dystrophy and never thought he would marry let alone become a father.
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OH Patricia, this is so beautiful...and so very touching....tears...you can just feel the love he has for this baby...this picture is priceless...and the poem wonderful...so very well written...a wonderful poem...Luff Linda xxoo


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
    Thanks Linda for the nice review. The father has muscular dystrophy and never ever thought he would marry let alone become a father.

reply by l.raven on 21-Jan-2015
    OMG...tears of joy...truly...there truly is a God...speechless...sigh
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I did a sigh of relief with this because at first I thought it was about a baby dying with then angel wings but I'm thankful that wasn't the case. You did a great job and it sounds like this baby is very loved. Great job friend and I hope everyone enjoys the baby because they're only small for so long.


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the nice review. Our little angel is now almost 16 months old and her daddy is so enamored with her. He has muscular dystrophy and never thought he would marry let alone have a child. He and my grand daughter are such wonderful parents.
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A work that spells admiration, visualizes love and simply screams the pride taken in having muse that can all but writes for you, thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the nice review Ronnie.
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Well done 5-7-5 haiku. Beautiful picture of your great granddaughter. Those wings look very natural
At that age they do appear to be angels. Love the picture of you treasure


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the nice review. I enjoyed writing this poem.
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What an adorable picture. I've seen photographers do this a lot lately. The poem is sweet. With this short of a format, I would suggest perhaps changing one of the 'angels', so there is no repeated words.

Blessings,
Marsha


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks you for the review.
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