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The Skullcap and the Collar -- Pt 6


An Officer Tim Healy story.

  18 total reviews 
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Norma M.F.
 
 
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Excellent read. Loved the vernacular of the great dialogue. Even though it is part of a larger work, the story also stood on its own. You are a master storyteller, weaving humor with a bit of darkness and mystery.


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


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Hi Humpwhistle. You have the art of story telling at a perfect pitch. Once the eyes hit the first word, attention is complete. I loved this segment, alf


 Comment Written 13-Mar-2015



reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
    Thank you, Alf. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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bhogg
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Lee - this is first rate. The way you mix your colorful narrative and dialog had me at the end of the story way too soon. I've been a bit absent from FS, but will circle back and read some more about these characters. The two-time moniker was hysterical. Not what I expected. Bill


 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015



reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thanks so much, Bill. I've noted your absence. I hope everything is okay. I'm having fun with this Healy story, and hope to have a new installment posted today.

    Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment by
kriver
 
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Hi there Hump,
I really like your story all the chapters are really good. Excellent story line because it keeps the reader guessing and wanting to know what is going to happen next. I am
looking forward to the next chapter. Very good and believable dialogue.


 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015


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I love the unique languages you mystery and cops guys use. It is so legit sounding. If it is your imagination it is sure good. Enjoyed the story. Very visual. Blessings. Barbara


 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015


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Patti R.
 
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Somehow you manage to give me just enough, but barely! I want more. This is a veritable "page-turner", Humpwhistle. (Notice the capital H.)

You answer questions in each instalment, but then you create more, dammit.
I can imagine your delight in leading the reader on like this. Which is just as it should be!

Finally, Two-Time Timmy is explained. I bet the whores of his day miss him terribly. He is the original Bogo: Buy one, Get one free.

Young Tim must ask himself every morning what was he thinking joining the Force. And now the sultry Juliet turns out to be another insider. Again, dammit. Just when I was beginning to think you might have to give us a really good sex scene...

You really know how to throw a curve ball. I didn't see the ending coming, once again.

'And your Uncle Timmy got famous amongst the whores 'cuz (he) could do twice in the same time what a normally..'

'We (He) winked. "That's what we tell the newspapers, bucko..'

Patti



 Comment Written 11-Mar-2015


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This deserves a 6, hw, but I only have one left this week, and I've already given you 6's for this. The dialogue is perfect, the story is fast-paced and intriguing, and the reader loves the narrator and sympathizes with him. The description is so unique, especially the paragraph where you describe the Two-Two district. So very well done.


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2015


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Well, that ended well. Of course, we know he still has his job, don't we?? I loved the explanation as to why two time Timmy was called that! Might be good for the man, but he's useless to the woman! IMHO!! LOL. (It took me two years to work out what IMHO meant! And, LOL always meant, Lots of Love, before I joined FS!)
Okay, back to the review and the story. I love the way it's going, and I think this looks like it going to be a novel; is it? It's darned good any way! I am hoping Tim can talk his way out of any problems that are arising from the Monsignor being blown up. Good riddance, I say! Looking forward to the next one! :) Sandra


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2015


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Ric Myworld
 
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Two-time Timmy might have to be extra patient and do some heavy thinking to share his family prowess with Juliet, the not so fair maiden. As we've learned since grade school, FBI doesn't stand for "Female Body Investigator." Thanks for another great chapter. :-)


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2015


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Oh my! What a fantastic ending hook, hw! That's a reveal I'm sure none of your plot-guessing readers had a clue was coming. I appreciate how you allow the reader the freedom to use their imagination. Some writers go on and on with detailed descriptions of each character, even minor one-time appearances. That bores me and takes me away from the story. You never do that. You give just what we need. I like that a lot. Needless to say, I can't wait to read more.
Smiles,
Indy :-)


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2015


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