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Lancelot and Guinevere

Adult! A romantic liaison.

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Comment by
Walu Feral
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G'day mate. I enjoyed this script, it is very well written and presented and is easily understood. I must say though that it would have been a dangerous liason in those times. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
    Thanks for your comment.
    Glad you liked it.

    As this is one of a series of stories, there needs to be tension between the characters.
    So each character has various liaisons, or alleged liaisons, or obsessions, or weaknesses.
    This allows the next episode to have plenty of potential material to work with.
    I have to keep Lancelot, as he is the top poet and wit at court.
    Although all the characters are witty.
    Lancelot is also the top warrior, so is not likely to be challenged in a real fight.

    The idea of turning King Arthur into a drama series was first done by Geoffrey Chaucer [1343 - 1400], and even his wrtiting is barely understandable, unless you are an expert in olde english.
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Very well done. The emotion is carried very nicely by the dialogue. My only problem is that much of it seemed like talking-heads. Remember to show the audience their actions as well as their speaking. This adds to the passion of the moment.

There is a very good free script-writing program called Trelby. It has preset alt+ commands for action, scene, dialogue, transition and so on. I'm not allowed to give you a link, but you should be able to find it easily enough. I think it might be as big a help to you as it has been to me.

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
    Thanks for your comments.

    Thanks for the sriptwriting software advice.
    I did get one last week but it crashes.
    So am using xls at present, which in not user friendly.

    Reformatting a script for FanStory is time consuming for me at present.
    So what I post on FS is for entertainment of others.
    Very few members are into drama scripts, so thanks for your advice.

    Hope what follows does not sound like another monologue. It's my philosophy on drama.

    Re my scripts, they are radio scripts ( not film scripts or TV scripts) as presented to the Director or Producer. If she or he tells me to alter it, I will.

    Re the directions, I am using the BBC standard, and looking at their sample scripts.

    Basically I leave the actors to decide if a speech is emotional or angry, etc.
    The only clue I give is the words themselves.

    Equally, a forest scene may have birdsong and twigs cracking, but I would not go to that detail.

    I view it thus:
    Writer does 1/3.
    Director and Producer do 1/3.
    Actors do 1/3.

    So it's a team effort.
    I do not wish to be directing what happens after I have sold the script.
    I will bank the cash!

    PS May I ask, do your dramas get performed on the amateur/ professional stage?

    That's where I am trying to get to.
    FanStory is a bit of a diversion.
    But your comments are helping me.

    I find the drama script to be the most dynamic writing style.

    Like driving a Formula1 racing car.

    Thanks again.
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