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The Upside of Down


A poem for my daughter

  62 total reviews 
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dragonpoet
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Well done ode to your daughter. The picture shows how she is nothing close to 'down'. It is an unfortunate name for a syndrome for its meaning means sad and it is something that doesn't often describe people with it. Thought it does describe those who look away and try to ignore any possible difference in another human being.

Kee writing

dragonpoet


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 20-Apr-2015
    Thank you very much for your kind words and five stars. Unfortunately appearances are more important to many people. But that is their loss.
    Best regards,
    Rodger

reply by dragonpoet on 20-Apr-2015
    You are very welcome, Rodger. How right you are about appearances being important to some.

    Joan
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rama devi
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Hi Rodger...How wonderful this is. Down's children are huge blessings in the arena of the heart.

Superbly voiced lines:

Without the sight to see her vast array,
their downward view assumes an empty glass.

Great word play on downward view. Superb consonance of S and alliteration of A as well.

Wonderfully sweet, love this:

Down Syndrome is a face that many wear,
though "down" does not describe my daughter's smile,
her spirit seems to bubble through the air -
she moves ahead with confidence and style.

YES:

Like looking at the cover of a book,
the children stare with wonder in their eyes.
But as her words invite a closer look,
they find a girl whose heart wears no disguise. Yeah!

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For down is rarely shown upon her face, (suggest ; or -- or . here)

Pitch perfect closing note:

Her extra chromosome is not a frown
when viewed beneath the light of Heaven's grace.
Masterfully crafted with superb meter and rhyming. I especially like smile and style, array and away.

Phonetically rich, too.

but the most salient aspect of this poem is the touching content. Beautiful!

Bravo.

Love,
rd


 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    Hello rd!!

    Thank you very much, my friend. I have no trouble writing about my dear Amanda, she is a blessing bestowed to me like none other. I often wonder about things. Perhaps God gave the world these special people to show us that love can cross our mortal boundaries despite any earthly so-called "disabilities"- the ability to love is not in the flesh but in the spirit.

    Thank you for your fantastic review and suggestion (which I will correct in minute). I know you're not inf fanstory very much anymore so that makes your review even more appreciated!

    All the best
    With love
    Rodger

reply by rama devi on 04-Apr-2015
    Thanks, dear Rodger, for your lovely, gracious response and so glad you liked the review. Yes, I am just here for a 'free week trial' which ends soon--then back to standard. I'll visit intermittently, as time allows.

    Your daughter sounds like a HUGE blessings, for your family--and for the world! We need more people who are all about love!

    Best wishes and Love,
    rd
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What a gorgeous and precious smile you captured in Amanda in this picture,
she just beams like sunshine all over! And my oh my well can you be so
proud of her success and achievements in the Special Olympics events
she has excelled in!
This is a tenderly loving and touching poem on this remarkable daughter,
penned by a truly proud and dedicated father who has seen her triumphs
and trials overcome by sheer determination and undaunted confidence
and assertiveness within her own self. They really have misnamed 'down'
regarding this condition; She is ever living proof of persevering beyond
the labeling! Thanks for sharing....and congrats to your sweet Amanda!
Love and blessings, Ronni


 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
    Hi Ronni, Thank you very much, my friend, for your beautiful words. Her attitude and approach to life often inspires me to be more outgoing and enjoy every hour of each day. Thank you for you beautiful review.
    All the best,
    Rodger
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Congrats to you and your precious daughter, a warrior of love and smiles! Go Girl!
I think that we all need to run a race in laughter. Great poem and message. I am so glad that you have gotten many reviews. Have a blessed Resurrection Sunday as you celebrate the Risen Lord and his joy filled children. flylikeaneagle


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    Thank you very much for your wonderful review! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! Blessings to you as well!
    All the best, Rodger
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Sometimes a word characterizes a condition, and produces a negative response.
Changing the name, or creating a euphemism, will sometimes work.

With a program of awareness, and the recognition as to how wonderful the innocent children of Down's Syndrome are, the word could be used to get to people to "look down before you travel on," to see the face of love, acceptance, and loyalty of each child.

We are all afraid of what we do not understand, but we cannot look away as a solution. We must push for understanding.

The words of the song, Lonesome Road, should make us all aware, that we should consider the burdens of others before we move on to consider our, often times, lighter burden.

We might even lighten our load by releasing a hundred pounds of compassion on a person who is most vulnerable because of their unwavering love, loyalty, and ability to sweep away our minor sorrows, with the promise of their smile for all our tomorrows.

Understanding will promote compassion, take the child out, the world will become warmer as a result of the smile.
Reach out to others who also have suffered, they wait for your hand.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    Wow what a terrific review! Thank you so much for your beautiful words and extra star in review of my poem. She has weathered great sadness in her life yet still wakes up each morning ready to take on the world. All I know is she has taught me much more than I could teach her. Can she be difficult at times, Yes, but it is always me overlooking her and giving to the demands of the day. I love the words to "Lonesome Road", I've heard it sung many times.
    Thank you for your great review, I would give you a six if I were allowed to award reviewers.

    All the best, Rodger

reply by ElPoetry001 on 02-Apr-2015
    A blessing in disguise, difficult but worth it. Unconditional love you receive cannot be purchased, it must be earned.
    Each day you provide, God provides for you. You have help on your journey.
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Such a beautiful and touching poem. It's a great tribute to your wonderful daughter. I have a son with autism and it drives me nuts the way so many want to see what he can't do rather than what he can, and he has a great talent for art/drawing. Hopefully your piece will enlighten many.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    Thank you, ragamuffin, I appreciate your kind words in reviewing my poem. So many people look at the negatives and never know the beauty and love that lives within. Your son sounds like a wonderful young man and I wish both of you much happiness.
    All the best, Rodger
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This is a beautiful and inspirational story shared through your heartfelt words. Easy poetry with flow and rhythm, but most importantly true meaning. 'Her spirit seems to bubble.' How loved she is and how recognised. Truly delightful both picture and words. Her open heart shines through and her smile knows no superlatives. Just delightful. Know that I have and will continue to meet 'Downs' children through my work, each one is special and original as is every child. But I have never met one child with this 'syndrome' who is not full of joy and sunshine. So how about 'happiness syndrome'? I gave you the 6 star for the sheer emotion and truth as well as some of the original wordings. all blessings to you and your family K


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    Hello SimplyK and thank you for your wonderful review! I like happiness syndrome! When I look at her, I often think that I'm the one with the problem and I should be more like her in many ways. I'm glad you have met some "Downs" children and I hope everyone can at some point, they are a pleasure to be around. Blessings to you as well!
    All the best,
    Rodger
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What an excellent poem about a topic I've never seen in poetry before. Because it is so personal, and so positive about your daughter, it tells a marvellous tale in a very small space. I like that emphasis on 'down' being and inappropriate word to describe her personality. Your author's notes add huge value for the reader, but your well penned verse stands alone in bringing fresh perspectives for readers who may be just like anyone else and 'glance then look away,
assigning her a label as they pass'


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    hi Mark,
    It was a challenge to squeeze "down syndrome" into the meter lol.
    Thank you very much for your kind comments about my poem and author's notes. She provides the inspiration every day so on occasion, I write her a poem. Thanks for stopping by!
    All the best,
    Rodger
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She may be having Down's Syndrome but her spirit is very much up. Her achievements and smile in the photo are proofs that she is indomitable. The extra chromosome are not cumbersome for her as she is having His grace. Thanks for sharing the poem and the author notes.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    You are right, her spirit is almost never down. She has had many challenges and grief in her life yet she always looks ahead to the next day. Thank you very much for your wonderful review!
    All the best, Rodger
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A beautiful picture of your daughter, along with a poem that is a beautiful tribute to her, and down syndrome also. Good word flow and rhyming make it easy to read, and understand.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    Thank you very much for your kind words, I'm glad you enjoyed reading my poem.
    All the best, Rodger
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