This was quite an enjoyable poem to read although I was a bit confused as initially it seemed he was falling face down (dandelions in mouth etc) and following this appears to be on back (hand on chest, clouds above).
The amalgamation of words made it a little difficult to read as well.
Garlick is also spelt garlic.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2015
Thanks for your comment. It's written by someone only 10-11% conscious that's why its hard.