Childhood dreams...
A poem about dreams.
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One never knows what will happen next.....

  11 total reviews 
Comment by
sibhus
 
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Would a glass crash on carpet, maybe, but it would be difficult.

Good action with plenty of details that really help to set the scene. I also that the dialogue was very nature with a good sense of reality to it. This is something that happens everyday all over the country and fits well with the picture. A great entry for the contest and good luck.

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 Comment Written 27-Apr-2015



reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
    Thanks for your insight into my story and pointing out your thoughts on the 'glass crashing". I agree there would be no sound attached to the action, but the word does imply a sudden collision with the floor....at least that was my intent...lol....As for the setting, unfortunately, you are right and it is happening in our city every single day....so many lives unjustly taken and so many families filled with grief. Thank you for taking the time to comment on my story. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day!
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