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Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Art of Flirting"

All rhymes, but different flavors of rhyme

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ScarletAffliction
 
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But you DO have such an artistic ability, so it's no wonder you're rather good at flirting. All that creativity and energy being spent on all those hapless damsels who don't see the dashing Marillion comin'. hee hee.

I'd warn them if I didn't have trouble stayin' away too! ::hides behind james:: ;)


 Comment Written 15-Oct-2005


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searchen
 
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Marillion - Hi. I can't read your work too often. Tom only allows 4 sixes per month..good conscience wouldn't allow me a five..!..haha. You've captured the innocence of a beginning, that small window of time where all is okay, all defenses are down & nothing is out of bounds...the playfulness of the moment...completely.

'What most call flirting, I define as art.'...hahaha.

Excellent post.

Happy writing,
searchen



 Comment Written 14-Oct-2005


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Hey David,

For some reason, I didn't write this when I read the piece, and only realised now. I like it as always, but perhaps more so than many. I think when you use iambic pentameter, you truly are in your element. You have mastered this form completely, but keep applying little twists, in different ways

Excellent as always
Sean


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2005


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rob_the_magnificent
 
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I've just finished reading your poem, "The Art of Flirting." This is another great piece of writing from you that has floored me. I was fascinated at your description of such a simple, yet eternal "art", as you write. Great job.


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2005


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Awesome poem as always very unigue in presentation. You always show me an old thing in a new light. Great imagery and good flow. This was my favorite lines.

Faux haughtiness, retorts, and playful smacks
For teasing statements, claims, (and sneak attacks) .



 Comment Written 13-Oct-2005


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Hey Marillion!

I have to admit, I had to read the second part of the first stanza a few times aloud before I could get the correct rhythm of it (I kept running out of breath), but then I got it!
I'm so literal, it's pathetic. Flirting goes right over my head half the time...so no wonder it took me a few times to get this!

Anyway, I loved your use of language. You play with words so well--
Thanks for sharing!

Take care,
Sissy


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2005


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Now, that's a game we've most engaged sometime.
We find here actions that we know so well.
Without the counter, it's not worth a dime.
It's only throught the feedback that we tell
I do delight that you are writing more
We need your standard when we set the score


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2005


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A lost art also.

You have refined it and I like the approach...:)
Noticing a woman's clothing is important. She spends a lot of time putting it all together....

Your verbiage is great in this David.
You take the simple to a poetic complex and it works every time.

Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

No nits. Awesome write.

No topics are taboo; no thoughts too small
To launch upon your unsuspecting ears,
But clever wording and the wherewithal
To strike precisely rankles, but endears
My methods to your churning mind and heart:
What most call flirting, I define as art.



 Comment Written 13-Oct-2005


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clhutchinson
 
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This is great in content bring out the mannerisms with interesting and colorful wording. I love the images that are well expressed and clear. Nice flow of thoughts in a great format.

I studied this one deeper trying to figure out the meter. I see the pentameter easily but, I'm still puzzled with the iambic part. I see it but have such a difficult time deciding which part is truly pronounced in sound. The second stanza really throws me, becasue the lines start off with what sound like strong sounds. No fault being intended. I'm just trying to learn. I've steered away from meter because of this uncertainity, but went ahead tried my first one last night. Just when I thought, maybe I had it, I am complexed all over again. lol.


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2005


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Mrs Jones
 
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I like the structure very much. In fact I really, really like it. Here we go again, Lover boy. Lol
"My methods to your churning mind and heart:
What most call flirting, I define as art. "

Excellent
Cheers
Rose


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2005


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