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5-7-5 - curiosity


wash your hands, please (a contest entry)

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Lovinia
 
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Hi Dawn

I do hate when I miss such gems as this. Truly a splendid entry and deserving of high placement ... even higher than you had. ;] . i love the delightful image you selected and your few words manage to 'say' so much more. i always enjoy alliteration - 'hand/hand', 'match/made'. you also create a lovely chuckle, first at the sweetness of the image conjured in our minds and then secondly, as the reader who identifies closely with your first two lines ... remembers that soapy baths follow all childhood adventures, or at least a good hand wash. lol Delightful. Warm hugs - Lovi xoxo


 Comment Written 25-May-2015


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This is spunky and sweet. Sounds just like it is spoken by a grandmother. My precious granddaughter is on the move from dawn till dusk. Has a pretty well set bedtime so she can get up and start it all over again.

Your poem is perfect from picture to # of syllables.

Best wishes in the contest. You placed! Oh, I see that now.


 Comment Written 22-May-2015


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Hi Dawn :) Congratulations in your joint 3rd placing in the contest. Your 5-7-5 is lovely, and in my opinion, better than the other entries that placed!
Good use of alliteration and enjambment, love the humour in your observation!
Well done :) Kindest regards, Debra x


 Comment Written 19-May-2015



reply by the author on 21-May-2015
    Thank you so much, Debra! I had no idea until I read this - as I have only one hour at the library (my pc is still in for repair and will be for at least a week). I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thrilled at the news. :)

reply by Debra White on 21-May-2015
    It's nice to be the bearer of good news for a change! I hope your PC is soon mended x

reply by the author on 25-May-2015
    :) Hugs.
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Ha, great 'satori' Dawn. I love the picture that accompanies this lovely, whimsical poem. You're on a contest jag, it seems. LoL. I hope you win with this terrific entry.

:) Bev


 Comment Written 08-May-2015


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Oh my how I love this picture, it reminds me of all my sweet wonderful granddaughters. But even more of my grandsons, in the fact about washing hands. But all children just don't realize the importance of clean hands I guess.


 Comment Written 07-May-2015


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Ha ha Think most of the kids need a permanent soap on a rope around their neck..This was a cute little write that said so much with so little words Kudos for sharing
tk


 Comment Written 07-May-2015


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curiosity
and children go hand in hand
a match made for soap

You are so right, Dawn -
they do go hand in hand - I just love the innocence
of little ones. We had to vote today and it was at the
village school - through the window we were able to see the little ones sitting at their desks and behaving like little angels - for now!!


Margaret
sitting


 Comment Written 07-May-2015


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You are so clever!
Go hand in hand
A match made for soap!
Hahaha too cute, sis! I thoroughly loved this little ditty! Ver well done as always!


 Comment Written 07-May-2015


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Ha, ha, oh, that is so true. What a witty way to put this axiom. And the picture works so well with this shorty, yet truthful little piece. Some really outstanding stuff there, Dawn.


 Comment Written 07-May-2015


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I no longer shake hands, but bump and not just with children! I enjoyed your pairing "curiosity" with caution and your bit of alliteration. More good wishes in the voting booth- Joan


 Comment Written 07-May-2015


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