Hi Michael. I'm no authority on haiku (or any other kind of poetry), though I love to read it. I'm really commenting here to let you know I'm still in the world of the living. Long time between drinks. Sorry about that.
In any case, I love this simple tribute to your mum, and to mothers everywhere. In just a few words you capture something priceless and beautiful, and that in itself is admirable. I wish I had your knack! The connection between 'petal', 'bouquet' and the 'scrapbook of memories' is clever. I suppose one mark of good poetry has to be the impact it has on a reader, and this really struck me vividly. Thank you.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
Welcome back! I don't really drink anymore, I fear what I might post or say in a review if a few shots kick in!!! Loved your insights. All I could hope for. Thank you, mikey
Hi Mikey! Love the idea of petals from various bouquets being pressed into a scrapbook of memories. I never did that growing up and wish I had. Come to think of it, I didn't get that many bouquets growing up LOL! You've got a bit of competition with a similar 'ku in the contest. I wish you all the best of luck. Sue
I have pressed many flowers. Flowers given by a lover, flowers given when my children were born, even flowers from a funeral. Each brought back treasured memories. Giving flowers is a dying tradition. I miss it. I love the picture. Great work.
I liked the alliteration of petal pressed.
The play between flowers and memories presented as an arrangement of something that is considered pretty was pleasant.
The satori line fed back in for me, both physically and on a secondary level... Not just the literal image of a mom making a scrapbook using flowers... but the preciousness of a memory, pressed in time, a compilation of love that a mom crafts in a child's heart.