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robina1978
 
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I did not read what you had to finish, But to me this seems a perfect horror ending for a chapter. He had killed his pregnant wife, now he got a call from his dead unborn daughter. Then he hangs himself. The police found three bodies. Best wishes for the contest.


 Comment Written 11-May-2015



reply by the author on 11-May-2015
    Thanks for your thoughtful comments, Ine. Have yourself a wonderful week.
    ~Dean
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flylikeaneagle
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flylikeaneagle - Nancy Ann Gee
 
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Dean: You finished the story in your way with awareness of anger and bitterness. Innocent families were destroyed by hate. The detectives got a glimpse of this pain. Darkness resides in the world. You are a shining light in the storms, Dean. OK, you have your style. You added rains, "Holy Water," on the land. A long year before retirement. Who is this Lonnie? The mystery unfolds... flylikeaneagle

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 Comment Written 11-May-2015



reply by the author on 11-May-2015
    Yeah, well...my life right now ain't exactly bowl of cherries, Nancy, I can tell ya that. I guess that comes though in my writing most times...my moods, I mean. Don't fret, however. My faith is still as strong as ever, and that never wavers. This is how I deal with the pain. I write about it, and put others in far worse position than I would ever want to be in. After all, you know what they say...

    "Misery loves company."

    I hope you're doin' okay, and thanks for the review. ~Dean
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Absolutely wonderful.
At least I have a six this time.
Excellently done.
No problems noted. Loved the ending.
I would expect nothing less.


 Comment Written 11-May-2015



reply by the author on 11-May-2015
    Thank you very much, Barb. I'm really glad that you enjoyed this one. As always, your feedback and support is invaluable to me, my friend. Much obliged. :)
    ~Dean
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dmt1967
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Exceptional
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This story had me on the edge of my seat. The king of sinister is back my friend. With some of the stuff you have written lately, all of it good mind, I thought you'd gone soft lol. Good luck in the contest, and thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 11-May-2015



reply by the author on 11-May-2015
    Nah, that'll never happen, my friend. I couldn't allow it even if I wanted to. Horror is where my passions lie where writing is concerned.
    Thanks so much for the exceptional rating and for your very thoughtful comments as well. I'm truly grateful for all. ~Dean
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Sis Cat
 
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Good. It's morning so I can review this. Tight writing, Dean. Snappy, electric. Dialogue and plot pulled me into story. Dark and haunting. A great response to the prompt. Visual and visceral writing. No slags. I thrilled reading this. Thank you for daring and scaring. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 11-May-2015



reply by the author on 11-May-2015
    Oh, it's entirely my pleasure, Sis Cat, believe me. I just really happy to know that you enjoyed the story.

    Thanks too for the very generous rating and thoughtful feedback. As always, I truly appreciate and value your opinions very much.

    Have a great week, and I'll catch you on the flip side...
    ~Dean ;)
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