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Don't Die Alone


Fear throughout my life to die alone

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Comment by
Selina Stambi
 
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Beautiful in a sad, lost, poignant sort of way.

Great free verse. Tugged at my heartstrings.

Best wishes for the contest.

Sonali



Fear throughout my life (of dying) alone

me tight. (H)e answered


 Comment Written 19-May-2015



reply by the author on 21-May-2015
    OMG Sonali, I won the damn contest. First time ever. Only 7 people entered but the $35 member cents isn't what matters. It will help out though now I have to get writing more. lol

    lulube

reply by Selina Stambi on 21-May-2015
    Lori, I am SO thrilled for you. Congrats and get back to writing! You GO, girl!! Big hugs, xxx

reply by the author on 22-May-2015
    thxs for that Sonali

    lulube
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lakeport
 
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Don't die alone, indeed it would nice to have a loved one near when the time comes to go. A very heartfelt expressed poem. Thanks for sharing it, God bless you. Hugs! Lakeport.


 Comment Written 19-May-2015



reply by the author on 19-May-2015
    thxs so much for reading this with the simple insight for a loved one to be near when the time comes to go. Lakey, I don't think I write in a confused manner, but apparently some think it's about being alone now. Not so, I've overcome that, and I don't know if I could put up with someone else's constant need to be picked up after. It's become a pet peeve now.

reply by lakeport on 19-May-2015
    some might even no anymore that the are alone. But it is everyone's feelings.
    As long as they remember me.
    Hugs! Lakeport.

reply by the author on 21-May-2015
    Yes, remember me too

    lulube

reply by lakeport on 21-May-2015
    Heaven will Know. Hugs! Lakleport.

reply by the author on 21-May-2015
    thxs for that

    lulube

reply by lakeport on 21-May-2015
    you are welcome, Hugs! lakeport.
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Tatarka2
 
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I thought this was very poignant, and I commend you for your courage in sharing this fear. Since this is a contest, I feel I need to rate the entries in comparison to one another. For me, this poem just didn't flow as well lyrically as some of the others. I do realize that it's free verse, and I respect that. Again, I congratulate you on your courage in sharing your particular "phobia."


 Comment Written 19-May-2015



reply by the author on 19-May-2015
    thxs for your honest opinions and your honorable comments. I really appreciate your review and your time. Yes, free style/verse, can be a bit off for some to read sometimes being that they read poetry that is in perfect metered lines. I sometimes read a few more times to feel the written rhythm
    and not what I expect.
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mommerry
 
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You have set out the reason for your fear and your suffering because of it. Now you should write how reaching out to care for others needing company has been a part of conquering this fear. Good job.


 Comment Written 19-May-2015



reply by the author on 19-May-2015
    thxs for the suggestion and idea. I have been a care giver all my life, it is part of the fear that no one will be there for me. lol silly but it horrifies me.

    thxs for your review and support
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livelylinda
 
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Author: if you think about it, we all die alone. This is the process of our body parts ceasing to function until we are dead. Much like a car engine which ceases to work. Or, if you look at it from a religious perspective, angels hover 'round us to guide us, as we die, up to Heaven where we find the best life possible filled with love and all that makes us happy. I've been at that place where you are. I now live alone, in poor health and old. I do not feel loneliness, ever. I can step outside and knock on a door, pick up the phone to call someone, send an e-mail or "talk" with others on Facebook. I am active in my church and see many people on Wednesday and Sunday. Going home alone is refreshing.

Your poem is well written but it exudes the fears of a five year old whose best friend and neighbor moved far away with their family. A new focus might be healthier.

You already have someone to believe and trust in, who will be there when you die . . . God.

Good luck in the contest.

livelylinda


 Comment Written 19-May-2015



reply by the author on 19-May-2015
    thxs for your insightful comments and support in this review.
    I have no problem living alone now, the first two years were hard but I have found a creative side of me that I never knew I was into. different surroundings, people, money availability/not.
    But it's been along time now and I know a relationship with value would be my last one and it would take me to my death, but not alone. Just my mind. I've put most of my life into others lives and cared for all that I can help because I felt the best person I have been when caring for others and not myself, but I can't be that person for myself, even though I realize the religious belief and went to church for years with parents, I still have my doubts because of seeing some of my parents well kept secrets of themselves, never laying things straight out, has me on the outside but totally into my soul/spirit.
    thxs for the advice.


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TPAC
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You go. Poet tender cries is felt in this work capturing the poet heart and the sad projection held of being alone I never felt alone and don't think its possible, always something there Thanks for sharing


 Comment Written 19-May-2015



reply by the author on 19-May-2015
    Thxs for stopping by and for your great comments,. I've gotten used to living alone, can't see someone else being in my space full time anymore. visits ok. lol Dying alone is a panic situation in my head. I've been here for everyone and no one there at my final time haunts me.

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Being alone is really very difficult. When together one thinks that they shall be together for ever. But devastation starts when loved one leaves and you are alone. Education and understanding is the rescue. This is life and living alone for some time is reality; face it and win it.


 Comment Written 18-May-2015



reply by the author on 19-May-2015
    after still being single 2 yrs living by myself, I got used to it. Hobbies I never knew I had came about. lol Dying alone is my fear, after being here and there for everyone, to have no one with me (if able) seems a sad way to leave. I need a hand to hold. Let my spirit go without any baggage.

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patcelaw
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I understand what you are saying. I have been a widow for close to 20 years and expect I might die alone. I don't so much fear it, I just feel badly that my children might find me in bad shape before they could get to me as they all live many miles away. Patricia


 Comment Written 18-May-2015



reply by the author on 19-May-2015
    I know what you mean about being found too late. My daughter is just moving across the for a couple of years. Not the best time in others life spans. I hope she doesn't regret it if her grandparents or I pass away and she's not here.

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We all die alone..I think if we look to God it's not so much dying as stepping over..continuing life but in heaven...so would that help the fear to diminish
Well penned . I am Claustrophobic
God bless


 Comment Written 18-May-2015



reply by the author on 19-May-2015
    I guess it's all how you perceive life and death. alone we die in spirit but my soul that lives within me now needs someone to say I did good and it's ok to go. Just someone to hold my hand and I fear there will be no one at all.
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