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Get Well, Brooke!


Viewing comments for Chapter 10001 "Disburse in a Puff"

Writing for Brooke

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I loved everything about this poem, Tom. Excellent choice for imagery, which you skillfully wove throughout the verses. Let's hope all this positive energy will lift Brooke to a healthful state.


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    Thank you. Yes, many are praying and pulling for her. I hope it helps.
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A beautiful photo to accompany your fine tribute to Brooke. I'm sure she likes the white version of dandelions as much as the yellow.

Lois


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reply by the author on 30-May-2015
    Thank you mumsyone.
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This is so great. The POV for your poem works well. It is amazing that you were able to include both the dandelion and Sawyer in one poem. I love the lines

We fervently hope our prayers are enough
To make her ills disappear in a puff.

Those lines are great imagery. Good job and thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 29-May-2015



reply by the author on 29-May-2015
    Thank you jannypan. Those lines are heartfelt and flowed out easily.
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I love your closing, the depths of her love for Sawyer and his for her- one puff that really recalls our own childhoods. Such love is pure power. Hopefully our thoughts and those of her loved ones- well, Brooke was of the attitude that we are all her loved ones- will help her heal. Excellent poem, one that I am sure will make Brooke feel loved.


 Comment Written 29-May-2015



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    Thank you ravenblack. I sure hope she gets better.
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Perfectly rhymed and metered poem, Treischel. Brooke won't be able to find any mistakes and that will never do. But will do is the big smile your poem will bring to her face.

Terrific poem for a terrific lady and excellent addition to the get well card.

Gloria


 Comment Written 28-May-2015



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    Thank you Gloria. My best hope is to make her smile.
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Another fitting tribute I'm sure. This lady mady a lot of friends. Mostly before I arrived here but the tributes she is inspiring from right across the board are amazing.


 Comment Written 28-May-2015



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    Thank you Pantygynt. Yes, she has been number one poet and reviewer on the site for several years.
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There are numerous poems and writings appearing on the site a true outpouring of love and of support but this my friend is the finest one I have read to date


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    Thank you petalangela. Yes, i been reading them all too.
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I really enjoyed your poem to Brooke, Treischel! It is warm and heart felt with mention of Sawyer, her grandson! I really enjoyed the second stanza with the dandelions fluffy head and the rhyming words enough and puff! There are so many prayers going out for Brooke, this poem being one! Great job!


 Comment Written 28-May-2015



reply by the author on 28-May-2015
    Thank you Ginnygray.
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This is a lovely prayer poem for Brooke and a great tribute to our friend, teacher and supporter. Well done my friend.
Teresa


 Comment Written 28-May-2015



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    Thank you Teresa
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Treischel the is a lovely addition to the poetry and well wishes for our dear friend. She is sorely missed and her light we need. Patricia


 Comment Written 28-May-2015



reply by the author on 28-May-2015
    Thank you Patricia. Yes, she surely is.
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