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Can't Want To Daddy


a long journey in a short tale

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Comment by
Autumn Splendour
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I'm giving you a six because this is a heart wrenching narration of continual abuse by a parent to a child.

The dream like narrative in bold works like a haunting litany pulling the child into a deep abyss in which she see the filth in her and her surroundings.
"but i'm already there, sitting dutifully in the tepid, murky water of the tub,
that big, cold, porcelain tub. it's the old one with falcon claws clutching crystal balls,"

In the second dream like paragraph she sees herself as surrounded by snakes haunting her.
"i hate the Snakes.
They hate me more. their bloody tongues lash out at me, at my innocence,
at my nakedness. my body heaves with fright."

You write beautifully and I'm happy for you that you have emerged from this childhood nightmare to be able to tell your story. Thanks for sharing.




 Comment Written 21-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
    Autumn,
    Thank so much for this very understanding and thoughtful and certainly most generous rating as well.
    I truly appreciate this, thank you
    Cat

reply by Autumn Splendour on 22-Jun-2015
    You are welcome. Although I was never physically abused, I didn't have a Father's love either.
    You take care yah.
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jmdg1954
 
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I hate reading these stories. They burn me up inside. To think a father, a parent, one who is supposed to protect his children can do such horrible things to his child.

I am glad that you are fine, now. If these stories can be told and is somehow able to help one child, then its a win-win all around.

Nicely done. John

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 Comment Written 21-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
    John,
    I hate writing these stories as well. lol
    Actually, I like writing them from THIS side of the journey better than the other side, that's for sure.
    Thank you for your displeasure at hearing it... Because that's what we need more of. Not the ostrich in the sand... just the inability to accept it.
    I appreciate your response and your review as well
    Cat
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visionary1234
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Well I knew you'd have at least one out of me this week Cat. I've always been horrified at how many 'normal' looking people have grown up having to deal with such abnormal/cruel/inhuman upbringing. I had a friend who met his brother for the first time at a dance - and by talking, they worked out that their father was maintaining two separate families and had been for years. Humanity appalls me much of the time. Yet somehow, so many people have SUCH courage and such ability to get thru such a morass. Under the same circumstances, I truly wonder how I would be. This is a beautiful write, Cat, but you already know that, right?
:)Sharyn


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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
    Sharyn,
    I know that everything that happens to you makes you who you are. I wouldn't be who I am if not for what has happened to me. And so... that's why I wouldn't change my path. Besides, I've known great love in my life. I truly have.
    I am very blessed.
    Thanks so much
    Cat
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This is really powerful writing that tugs at the reader's heartstrings. The alternative type face and lower case "i" in those parts where the child speaks directly is an excellent device easily understood by the reader. We know exactly where we are with this.

The detailed description of the bathroom is another device we recognise as in estreme situations the mind tends to concentrate on trivia as if to blot out the enormity of the events taking place.

All through I had a sense of deja vu and I wondered if you had reworked this from earlier work or a poem or perhaps a private message at some stage in explanation of another piece. In fact now I come to think of it that is the most likely explanation.

I seldom review prose work but I do feel that you have something amazing here.


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
    Gynt,
    Your words truly touch me. And yes, you've read this before... I"m glad that you remembered. I sent it to you by way of email some time back.I appreciate that you've taken the time (for me) to review my piece of prose. It means a lot to me.
    Thank you my friend.
    Puss
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Everyone knows how bad it is
but no one does
everyone tries to comfort or cover it over
but no one can
Everyone says they understand
But no one can

THEY JUST DONT GET IT

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 Comment Written 21-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
    (((((Petal))))))
    Yes, you have said that. So true.
    But you know... they try.... some people REALLY try.
    And that has to mean a lot. It has to... otherwise, we will become bitter.
    And that has no space in a life that is on the journey to wellness.
    At least I've found it to be counterproductive in happiness.
    Thanks Petal.
    Cat
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Your story is very sad and deserves to be told. Many children are abused mostly by family members. It does not make sense why a father wants to abuse her little girl. The person who is supposed to love and protect his child. I am so happy that everything changed for the better. It is well written with excellent wording. You were a very pretty young girl.


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
    Meggie,
    Thanks so much, yet again.
    and for your lovely comments.
    I appreciate it
    cat
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walbc
 
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This is a hauntingly beautiful narrative Cat. The way you evoke imagery is amazing. It makes me so very angry though. I've never in my life heard of so much child abuse as on this site. You have been through so much and you are a survivor.

Your story is exceptionally well written and more than worthy of six stars.

Warm regards, Wendy.


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
    No use getting angry now.
    He's dead.
    Like your mom.

    Let's celebrate. ;)

    (((((W))))))
    Ever watch A Fish Called Wanda?

    A "wa' (W) for Wanda... (or , in this case, "Wendy")

    Thanks so much
    Cat

    I just had a thought...

    new quote by Cat... (I think I"ll pen something disturbingly 'prophetic"... (feel free to quote me)

    "We can let it define us, or design us"
    -Cat S. Ginn

    (no one has used those words, have they?)

    lol

    go forth and design.


reply by walbc on 22-Jun-2015
    I'll design, you define!
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Gypsy Blue Rose
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Wow Cat, this is an amazing piece of art. You were, and are, a very precious child and your father abused you. No father day for him. I don't know what to say about his death but I am glad your mom, you, and your sisters got away. <3
Great job!


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
    GBR,
    You' re so sweet, hon... He's dead, nothing to say except... move along move along... nothing to see here. ;)
    Thanks so much
    oh, and I have one sister, one brother. My brother misses him. He needed a father, and so he forgave and forgot a lot of things.
    We do what we have to go get through
    Cat
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CD Richards
 
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I found this piece very moving, and very infuriating at the same time. There is never any excuse for the abuse of children - sexual, physical or emotional. And alcohol is no excuse for anything, as far as I'm concerned. Nor, really, is the fact that someone else did the wrong thing by them. There never seems to be an end to the excuses of people who choose to do the wrong thing.

I'm glad the nightmares have stopped.

Thanks for sharing, Cat. This piece is exceptionally well written, and in my mind thoroughly deserving of the six stars.


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
    Craig, you're a sweetheart.
    Thanks so much. No need to be angry at him. He's dead.
    Dead is dead, right?
    ;)
    Cat
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