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PoemsOfDD
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This is a sold write. It has its own style and is descriptive allowing the reader to feel how tormented and unsettled the subject matter is. The lay out is nicely done and the picture is a good choice as it too is conflicting within itself. Well done on this interesting read.


 Comment Written 15-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    Thanks :)
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Been there, done that. I like how you use opposites to show the confusion and lack of direction. Rumbling, twisting and turning, your mind is twirling. That is also good alliteration. The poem may exaggerate this as far as real life butit is for enhancing the effect and you succeed


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    I too have been there before. Just not knowing what my next move we be. Thank you. In time things always get better.
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The anguish of it all, you have caught a time of stress so well and times like these
can make us crazy if we let them. Nicely crafted and your words give images of the emotional turmoil of it all.
Bless you
John




 Comment Written 14-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
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OUCH! This poem strikes a chord, and it's NOT an harmonious one. VERY well done - I swear it will resonate with every reader. It sure sounds like ME sometimes, especially when I can't sleep!


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    Thanks, some days are like this.

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 21-Oct-2015
    Yup. You're welcome.
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Your poem reminds me how unsettling it can be to worry about decisions we are faced with. You expressed that very clearly and the picture nailed the emotion. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    You are right. Things can get that way when we worry to much. Thank you
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Your poem is a perfect reflection of your title. It creates a clear and expressive
view of personal turmoil. "Rumbling, twisting and turning." is not a great place
to be but a good way of describing the prisoner's torment.

I think you did a great job on this and your photo choice is a good one!

Linda



 Comment Written 13-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    Thank you for a lovely review.
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Unsettling. Urgent feeling well portrayed. Awesomely weird art perfect for the poem. Evoked emotion, a sense of frantic need.


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    Thanks
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Sometimes, we need to step off the merry-go-round
to slow the world down
take a deep breathe
to find the inner or outer calm
and then look around
from a different point of view
Sometimes, walk away from stress
to see it more clearly
and lessen its grip
This is a very strong emotional poem
very well written
Great picture to amplify the stress
Hope you're doing okay now


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    Yes, step back and relax. Life will be alright. Thank you.
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Well, this is a sort of unusual write - but it conveys some feelings that I think most of us have dealt with at some time or another! Thanks for sharing!


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
    Thank you for reviewing
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Yes, I've been here
twirling, whirling in fear
not knowing which way
is which... railroaded
into a bar... ditch.

Been here... bought the
t-shirt... oh wait.
I designed that one! ;)

Very well said:

'Don't know if I'm coming or going.

Which way is right or left?

Up or down?

Rumbling, twisting and turning.'

(and so we all lose direction in our lives...
lost even when we're found...
yes, I see... )

'I hear yet, I don't see.

Is anybody there?

Stop! Stop!

I'm trying to think. '

(at war within ourselves... the inside noises so loud, we can't even think)

'My mind twirling.

Can't get going.

Can't stop moving. '

(mania. it's a trip, without leaving the f..arm.)

'
I just want to rest.

I don't want to stress.

My mind keeps twirling.'

(I'm so done... I don't want to ruminate over and over, but I can't stop the thoughts... in rapid succession, still they come)

Are you alright?
Are you on or off medications?
Do you need to talk?

(((((hugs)))))
Very well said... so well said, I have to believe that you know as much about this as
I do... and I do because I live it. And Unless you've lived this... there is no way in hell you could tell it like this.

So... I ask again, are you ok?
If you are... Great! I'm glad to hear it, and congrats!
I'm loving this poem...
If you're not... I'm still loving this poem, but let's make sure you're ok...
first.

That's how convinced I am of the validity of this poem.
Cat


 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
    I am doing fine. Just every now and then I may have a day like this. I thank you for understanding and your heartfelt review I am Cat.

reply by I am Cat on 14-Jul-2015
    Well the creative juices are flowing quite nicely... be kind to yourself.. and if you need to talk... we are here. ;)

reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
    Thanks that means a lot.
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