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Birthday Wishes


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  22 total reviews 
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GoodHearted Woman
 
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You are a multi-talented person! An 80 word flash. I've been reading all the flash fiction I can find that has already proved itself, but haven't been reviewing because, being so old, I don't know whether it counts for either of us. But this little shortie must be commented on. You have quite a few to choose from on this "ribboned" poems section in "read." And while I'm here, which English grammar and punctuation book do you consider the best. I have a Jane Straus & I don't think there's anything wrong with it but Margaret Snowdon never heard of her. It seems like the name Strunk & White comes up a lot. What say you? GoodHearted Woman (Marcia)


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
    Thank you so much, GoodHearted Woman, for browsing through my portfolio. I love being rediscovered, and welcome the exceptional rating and your kind praise of "Birthday Wishes." There is a fine grammar program app (cheap) you could easily download called GRAMMAR-LY. When I taught, I used WARRINER'S HANDBOOK which I still think is as good as they come. Rod
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Pen of Fire
 
 
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Beautifully written. How sad to see someone you love come to that place in life. So much said in so few words. Congratulations on your win.


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
    Thank you so much, Pen of Fire, for sharing "Birthday Wishes" and for your wonderful praise and generous rating. Rod
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Muffins
 
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Beside Cancer, Alzheimer is the meanest disease nature has plagued us with. It's destroys not only the one trap inside its unforgiving hold, but the loves ones who watch their love one slip away. The heartache in this simple scene is tremendous.


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
    Thank you so much for sharing "Birthday Wishes" and for your wonderful praise and generosity. Indeed, Alzheimer is "the meanest disease" and I am pleased my short-short captured the pathos for you. Rod
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This is excellent. Somehow this piece slipped by me. I'm sure many of us can identify with your words as most know someone with Alzheimer's/senile dementia. Congratulations on winning the contest. Marilyn


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
    Hi Marilyn. Thanks so much for dropping by and sharing "Birthday Wishes." I really appreciate the congrats and your kind praise. Rod
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Dean Kuch
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Well, this certainly is a very sad story. It's so sad because in many instances, it is an all too common reality for some elderly individuals. In other words, this kind of thing does happen.

So tragic but well written.

Best of luck to you in the competition. ~Dean


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
    Yes, it is a sad story, too true these days. Thanks for sharing, Dean. Always appreciate your reviews. Rod

reply by Dean Kuch on 07-Jul-2015
    Anytime, Rod. :)
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The grandmother is in hospice care and has Alzheimer's .It's her birthday but she forgot how to blow the candles. You blew the candles and made a wish. Did you wish she died? Very good flash fiction. The picture used is perfect for your write.


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
    Hi Maggie. I will let you draw your own conclusions about what the Speaker wished for. But thanks so much for sharing "Birthday Wishes." Rod

reply by meggie13 on 07-Jul-2015
    You are welcome , Rod. My answer is that he wished for her to die .Meggie :))
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60 words is brief and quick, yet you were able to convey emotion (sadness, pride for the grandmother, helplessness).

The mixture of her age and the location -- being a hospice--conveyed much in a few words.

Your final words are almost haunting "weeping, I make a wish and blow."

strong story.


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
    I truly appreciate your sharing "Birthday Wishes," mvbrooks, and your understanding comments. Rod
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Debbie Noland
 
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A poignant write for the flash fiction contest. I like the way you imply at the end what the wish is. Your first paragraph sets the scene well and your few well chosen words provide good description and dialogue. Best of luck to you.


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
    Hi Debbie. I am so pleased you found "Birthday Wishes" poignant. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
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justjo66
 
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Very well written. Your very short story had everything in it to tell me about a life lived and forgotten. So sad. The picture reminded me of my own grandmother, now, gone. I miss her. Your story touched my emotions.

Jo


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
    Hi, Jo. I am delighted you enjoyed "Birthday Wishes" and could relate to it so easily. Thanks so much for sharing and your generous gift of stars. Rod
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Carole Rosa
 
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To the author of "Birthday Wishes", How very sweet and sad at the same time. My mother was in a nursing home for twelve years and passed at the age of ninety-two. She didn't know her own name, so I can relate to the story. It is done very well in sixty words. Good luck in the contest. Carole


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015



reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
    Hi Carole. I want to thank you for sharing "Birthday Wishes" and am pleased you could easily relate to the story. Rod
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