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All rhymes, but different flavors of rhyme

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It's NEVER too late for a summer time poem, especially one that helps to bring back fond childhood memories... Nice description, excellent flow... brings back the "positive" emotions you look for in writing such as this... Thank you!


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2005


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Hi... You know of course.... that I now smell like a dog...As I fell into your poem ....Paws first!

Not only are my hands and face sticky, from all the sweets...You forced me to eat....but I added a pound to the scales ....Thanks... I think?..... Great Visual...... [Stop-it!].....william hager


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2005


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"Ice cream sandwick sugar highs" - Been there, seen that, and thanks to you, I bought one when I got gas, tonight.
Good piece.


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2005


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There is something quite special about the Ice Cream Man. When that sound rings out we all turn our head for just a moment, even if it is just to grasp a memory.

Well done

Wally III


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2005


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It definitely brought summer back for me! This was a lovely burst of warm air. I've recently found out that I was lactose intolerant, and I also am trying to watch my weight, so it was wonderful vicariously enjoying a cone.


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2005


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I truly enjoyed this piece. I long for the summer days now as the forecast calls for flurries tonight. I loved the Pavlov line, how true it is. Even at my age, I hear those bells and I try to run faster then the kids to get my fix of the cold stuff. Great job...dklrd


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2005


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Again, only you could take the mundane and create prose...:)

Ice cream sandwiches, my favorite ice cream treat after Bryers Chocolate Fudge Swirl. Oh my God it's good.

The sugar rush and then crash!..:)

Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

No nits. Awesome write.

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My flagging day with buck-shot kicks
Of ice-cream sandwich sugar-highs.
The rush expands, and spreads within;
My worries melt; I'm young again.

Isn't it amazing how getting ice cream from the rural truck makes you feel like a kid again? I love it.


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2005


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Hey--

This was great. Reminded me the boardwalk at Atlantic City this summer. Meanwhile, it's in the thirties here tonight (ahh...where did the warm weather go, I'm not ready for snow!).

Loved it!
Sissy


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2005


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A little shorther then I'm used to seeing from you, but just as good, nonetheless. As usual, you draw out many scenes in one's mind with great usage of the english language and keen brushstrokes of the imagination. good write, brother. Cheers, zack
The dog days drip saliva heat,
A heavy-frothed humidity


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2005


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You are teasing us with this summery taste, with fall reminding us the cold winter is on our tails.lol. Fantastic images are so skillfully protrayed. The hot days and the ice cream truck comes with refreshing and sugary treats.Great and well thought out lines. I think I'm off to the freezer right now to find the ice cream.


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2005


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