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Bewitching Halloween


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I liked this very much - it seems almost TOO authentic, and I know there are folks who believe there are witches and they do have powers! (Shudder) Great job for this prompt! Best of luck.


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Hi Dawn. Thank you for that comment, "almost too authentic." That indicates to me that it's believable. I'm not so fond of Halloween, but I figured I'd jump on the bandwagon (or broom) with everyone else. I appreciate your fun review. Marilyn

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 25-Oct-2015
    Oh, but witches are fascinating! (I'm a good witch! LOL. Though some people have spelling problems when it comes to accusing...LOL!!!!) Sorry - I could NOT resist.

reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Very punny!

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 25-Oct-2015
    LOLOLOL!!!
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I like this witch poem, Marilyn, because it describes witches as CHILDREN perceive them. Your speaker does not seem malevolent or sinister, but implies she just wishes to be left alone. I especially like your choice of rhymes in stanzas 1 & 3. One small question though: It is not clear to me in your last stanza who is "safe & sound" 364 days a year--your speaker or the children.
Rod


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Hi Rod. The witch IS safe and sound and still around all year. What a thorough reader you are! You found a vulnerable side to the witch (as you mentioned above) "implies she just wishes to be left alone." How astute of you to read between the lines. I guess I wrote of a reclusive witch who only casts spells if she's threatened. Good job. Marilyn
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Sounds like one little witch you do not want to mess around with. Well written poem that descriptively uses terms such as "cast a sorcerer's spell," and "get your due," to better illustrate her seriousness along those lines. Should also be a good contest entry.


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
    Thank you, Brett, for your fine and supportive review. Frankly, I think witches may be spookily overrated, but good for Halloween.
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Hey, Marilyn, hello. This is an excellent entry for the contest. I love the picture. Is there a web site called 'vintage art' or is this actually a real piece of vintage art? Lol. Sorry if that's a dumb question. I wish you luck in the booths, M. Have a great day.

Ron


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
    Hi Ron. Thank you for your fine review of my poem. I like vintage art so I go on Bing or any search engine and type in "images of vintage art." To refine it further--type in "images of vintage (whatever)." I think you'll find some nice images and if they're really old, I don't believe there is a copyright--but I'm not sure. I usually try to take my own photos or use my own art to accompany. :) Marilyn

reply by DragonSkulls on 24-Oct-2015
    Thank you for the info, M. I'll try that. Have a great day.
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Well done, Marilyn. I suppose to be a witch inherently, it would almost have to be in the ghastly gene pool somewhere.

As for a wronged witch locating me where I dwell...well... I certainly would wish her the best of luck, heh-heh.

Well rhymed, wonderfully presented.

Good luck in the voting booths!

Always with admiration

~Dean :}


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
    Hi Dean. Thank you for your review. My grown kids love Halloween. Figured I'd hop on board the broom this year and celebrate along with them. (heh-heh) After all, I did grow up a stone's throw from Salem, MA. Marilyn

reply by Dean Kuch on 24-Oct-2015
    What the heck, Marilyn. You might as well, right?
    You are very welcome. ~Dean :)
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Terse and witty! Good to see a few witches alive and well all the year round, not just skulking around at Halloween scaring little children. I'm sure our local health food shop assistant is a witch, but our farm dam has now dried up for the summer so I can't test it with a ducking stool ...at least, not yet!


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
    Hi Tony. Thank you for your fun review. My home town is near Salem, MA, famous for its witch trials. Horrible time. Of course, witchcraft wasn't confined to that locale. I'm not much into Halloween, but thought I'd add my 2 cents. Marilyn
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This poem has a bit of taunting and mischievousness in its tone. Don't mess with this witch, she has already warned you it is not w good idea.

Excellent meter for this piece. It gives such a " just you try it, I dare you" feel to it.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
    Hi Debi. I'm not much on Halloween, but my grown kids love it. Figured I'd give it a try. Thank you for your fine review. Marilyn
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Hello :)

Cool poem about a witch. It has good meter and rhyme. The presentation is excellent, I love the picture and the orange background. Good contest entry.
gypsy


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
    Hi Gypsy. Thank you. It was a fun thing and I wanted to keep it simple. Marilyn
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I enjoyed your interpretation of the prompt and your taking on the persona of a witch, especially "not just on Halloween". Your rhymed quatrains and vintage picture are very effective, along with your regular syllable count. Best wishes in the contest and happy weekend when it arrives- Joan


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
    Hi Joan. Thank you for your astute review and comments. I'm not too much of a Halloween person, but my 45 and 46-year-old kids love it. Figured I'd dive in as the witch!! Marilyn

reply by Joan E. on 23-Oct-2015
    I'm not big on Halloween either, but I enjoyed your diving in--not to be outdone by your adult kids! Smiles- Joan
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Good little witch prompt entry Marilyn. It is nicely descriptive on the subject matter allowing a vivid picture of the witch to be conjured up - just like the brew the witch may mix. I like the wording of the first stanza, very clever. Well done and good luck in the competition.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2015



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
    Hi DD. Thank you for your fine review. I appreciate your comments, too. This was kind of a fun thing to write. Marilyn
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