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Well I cruised through 6 pages, Damn your a prolific writer. I found this one you mentioned. The first volume, Outside, outstanding intro to the story. Excellent last line where you left off. And a brief entry for a contest, the read me one.
I do like that you included this. It definitely helped me catch up in a readers digest sort of way.
By the way, I saw a lot of interesting titles in your portfolio. I'm going to spend some time reading some of your older material, just to see if it is as good as you title them.
JT


 Comment Written 02-Jan-2016



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    Many thanks for the great review, yet again. Yeah I like to write! I hope some of the earlier stuff doesn't disappoint! All the best, G.
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Even though I'm up to date on the chapters, it was fun to read the chapter summaries. It was a great thing to do to hel,your readers, and hopefully, give you some new readers as well, G.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)


 Comment Written 20-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 20-Nov-2015
    Many thanks for catching up with this one, Karyn. I am hoping to post the next part (XIV) at the weekend. Been busy with two other posts the last week so it took a back seat. Much appreciated as always.
    G
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"kept this mind" should be "kept this in mind".

Interesting introduction of the plot and concise chapter synopsis.

These should help readers better remember the story line you are writing.



 Comment Written 15-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
    Many thanks for your thoughts on this catch-up Brett. Much appreciated as always. G
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The summary is a great idea for those who needed to refresh their memories or missed parts of the story. The recap wasn't necessary for me. I was already up to speed. Just waiting on you for the next installment of the story.


 Comment Written 14-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
    Many thanks for your continued support for this story. The next part will be along shortly! Much appreciated as usual. G
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No need to apologize, at least to me - I get it, believe me! I'm always working on several things at once, and several novels, which means they take a back seat to each other often, and that's hard on reviewers. I try to cover it by a good intro, but lately I've found including some of the previous chapter is a help too. I think writing this as you've done is a wonderful courtesy, and you've organized it brilliantly!


 Comment Written 14-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
    Many thanks for stopping in on this one. I felt this may have been needed! All the best. G
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It sounds like Dean has control of your ship. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.


 Comment Written 13-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
    Man, that made me laugh. Thanks Charlie. All the best. G

reply by c_lucas on 13-Nov-2015
    You're welcome, G. Charlie

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    You're welcome, G. Charlie
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What a brilliant idea! Most helpful. Seeing the whole story condensed in all its horror in this way, makes my wonder why the survivors don't say, "Sod it, we're going back into stasis." :-))

Suggestions and a typo.(Square brackets indicate suggested deletions, and asterisks, suggested insertions):

'before going to the engine room to try to [turn the engines back on] *restart the engines*' (Makes it sound a little less like starting the car) (!!)

'He may know where [they] *Farrell and Cairns* are'

'Masters and Scott arrive in time to *see* a black swirling cloud fill the airlock corridor.


Adrian


 Comment Written 13-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
    Many thanks as always Adrian for the helpful catches and your continued interest in this story. It is greatly appreciated. G
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Yes, up to speed, but I have been following this novel from the beginning. It is good to have a refresher that explains how the novel got to where it is now. Hopefully, this summary will hook new readers. This sci fi horror story has legs. I look forward to Part XIV. Thank you for summarizing.


 Comment Written 13-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
    Many thanks for your continued support for this piece. I greatly appreciate it. G
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I think what had me confused is that I forgot that Amber was out of commission and the crew is on its own.
Thank you for the summary, G. It's a big help in continuing to read the story.

:) ellen


 Comment Written 13-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
    No problem, E. It was getting to a point were there are numerous plot threads and happenings so hopefully this aids to keep them in order! Much appreciated as always.
    G
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I can truly empathize with you. As my novel started building chapters I found that I had to keep a running summary just to keep readers informed of the past events that made the story what it was.
I do have a couple nits though.
You said in part 5 that Masters had seen something outside through a widow and may know where they are. Yet you never mentioned that again. It's a bit frustrating to get a solid clue every fourth or fifth chapter, and then the clue isn't followed up.
Why haven't they woken up Ash?
If Amber runs everything, how do they still have power and life support?
Are we ever going to see a 'Bad Guy' rather than seemingly random forces toying with the characters?

I think your idea of a summary post is brilliant. I had honestly forgotten about some of the minor events. I'm curious if this is going to end up as a novel or a really long, short story.


 Comment Written 12-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
    Hi Michael,

    Okay, Masters sees something out the window and asks Amber to wake everyone up. Since then Masters has either had no one to tell or been too busy trying to stay alive. Where they are leads to what is going on.

    Again Ash hasn't been woken up for a number of reasons. As above time and opportunity. Also it is stated in one of the parts that life support can only maintain the three of them. Six crew members - 1 awake at all times (2 briefly for handover). Then 2 presumed dead / missing meaning only another 2 can be woken.

    Power & life support are provided by a backup system. This works independently of Amber, as any backup system would otherwise it would be a pointless system. I sort of took this as read.

    In regard to the 'Bad Guy' - well that would be telling now!

    Many thanks for reading this catch up and some good points there that maybe weren't solidified in this.

    Much appreciated as always, G
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