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Double Acrostic Cleave-Sonnet

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Lindsee Cooper
 
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This is breathtaking!!
Wow! And so creative!
I have never even heard of a "cleave" before...
you have intrigued me and impressed me, for sure!
Wonderful work, my friend!!

Light and Love,
Lindsee

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 Comment Written 29-Jul-2019


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This is a fantastic poem; it is very clear a tremendous amount of work went into it. You really do know your craft. I've never come across a cleave poem before, thank you for the expert introduction!


 Comment Written 03-Sep-2018



reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
    Hi, thank you very much for reading and reviewing! Especially considering that it only payed 2 cents!

    Warmly,
    Light
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Tootie
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This is absolutely amazing in so many ways. It is filled with truth, beautifully written, artistically presented. I could go on and on. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. Awesome!


 Comment Written 21-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
    Thank you so much for review, especially because it didn't offer any 'monetary' reward! Thank you, Catherine!

reply by Tootie on 06-Mar-2018
    Thanks go to you! It was beautiful. :)
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The same complicated to create but I was rich as well and semen imagery I like to picture in the separation of the colors in the background font it read well with no grammar issues to speak also flowed well and ejective content was present to skip the measures complimented to semen imagery talk to Ricky 1024


 Comment Written 19-Dec-2017


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WriterCatherine
 
 
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WOW!!! Absolutely, amazing! I think you are an amazing writer. I love poetry that grabs you, (in a good way) and challenges you to take a deeper look at the meaning within the words. The spirit of intelligence shines through in your work.


 Comment Written 16-May-2017


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Technically, the poem meets all the parameters listed for a cleave poem so A+ on that. I love the imagery and the overall feel of the poem. The picture clearly inspired the words and the writer captured the parallel moods present quite well. I shared this image and poem with my daughters, who both loved it as well. It speaks in multiple dimensions and moods. I like that about it. Very inspiring.


 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017


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MissMerri
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Jyoti, you would need to be some sort of poetic genius to write a poem like this. No wonder it won this contest and my heartfelt congratulations to you. It is truly an artistic masterpiece. I read it three times all three ways you suggested and each time was unique and beautiful. I am so impressed with your talent. But the part I liked best was the theme.
"The ones who truly listen hear The melody that moves each star
A song which draws life's forces near Once mute, now tells us who we are."
Beautiful!


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016



reply by the author on 03-May-2016
    Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Dear, and for your graduations! It means a lot coming from you!
    I'm very grateful for your kind comments and generous rating!
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Congratulations!!! You certainly did deserve to win this one my friend. What a great composition in every way. Great message! The picture! The duel color combo. The rhyming ! Just fantastic. Well done! Nancy


 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016



reply by the author on 03-May-2016
    Hi Nancy! So sorry for this dreadfully late response! I got so very behind with the responses during the NaPoWriMo!
    Thank you for such a sweet congratulatory review and the generous extra star! I'm so glad you liked it!
    Love,
    J
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016



reply by the author on 03-May-2016
    Thank you very much for this wonderful news and for choosing my poem!
    Warmly,
    Jyoti
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This is bold, beautiful, and beyond expectation. It was a bit hard to read the Acrostic phrases, but I delighted when I deciphered them. That image is spectacular, a perfect canvas for your poetic portrait of the universe. Indeed, there is an awe, that is nearly religious in the verse. Both poems read very smoothly. The total composition was a pleasure to read. Bravo!


 Comment Written 22-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
    Thank you so much for caring enough to dig this up from my portfolio! What an unexpected gift!
    You are right, the acrostic is hard to read! I might add them as a title - just like you and Gynt did.
    Thank you for giving me the idea!
    I am so glad you liked it! Your feedback means a lot to me!
    Also, thank you for the generous six star rating!
    Warmly,
    Jyoti
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