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The Legend of Butcher's Holler


Sometimes a dog is a girl's best fiend.

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Comment by
GWHARGIS
 
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Excellent
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This definitely had the homespun feel that you wanted. Loved the rhythm in this. A good fireside tale to be sure. Great rhythm and enticing story line. Gretchen


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    Thank you for dropping by to read and review my story-in-a-poem entry, Gretchen. Your comments a sincerely appreciated.
    Thanks again!
    ~Dean
Comment by
rspoet
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  Rank:  40
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This is simply exceptional, my friend
The entire atmosphere of the poem
enhanced by the intricate rhyme scheme
with internal and external rhymes
excellent eerie meter
and a spooky touch of alliteration
Jeb should have known better than to mess
with any witch named Maven Fitch
and poor Old Yella can't hold a bone to Old Blue
Now, if only you could do graphics!
This should be a very strong contender
in the story poem contest
Exceptionally well done!
Note. I thought these contests were "supposedly" anonymous
If so, you should remove your name in bright red letters
or it may disqualify you, not that anyone wouldn't know who wrote it.
Best wishes in the contest.


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
    Thank you for your exceptional review, complimentary comments and six star rating, Robert. All are deeply appreciated.
    As for the anonymity of this particular contest, it is site sponsored and voted on by the CEC (Competition Enforcement Committee), so remaining anonymous is not an issue as it is not a blind contest. Hence the cover art for the story poem entry with my name in red emblazoned across it.
    Thanks so much again for the fantastic feedback, my friend. Much obliged!
    ~Dean :}
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Jannypan (Jan)
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#4 Ranked Poet
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This is a great story in a poem entry AND a great poem regardless of any contest. Your rhymes are great and natural sounding. Good job with alliteration in several instances. The artwork is spooky, but fitting. I like the internal rhyme. The poem reads well because of the careful attention to meter. I see no changes. Good job and best wishes in the contest.


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    First of all, thank you first and foremost for taking the time to read this rather lengthy poem, Jan. In addition, I am very grateful to your for your encouraging comments and exceptional six star rating. But more than winning the contest, great ratings, or anything else that might be involved, I'm just very pleased that you enjoyed the story and presentation.
    Thanks so much again, my friend.
    With gratitude
    ~Dean :)
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Chrissy710
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Hi Dean cant go past a six for this one it is a darn good poem and not because of the story content ( that too) but because of your rhyme and meter which I thought was excellent. You managed to keep the story, rhyme and meter tight and that is what I enjoyed. well done and good luck for the contest .Loved it Cheers Christine­???


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    First of all, thank you first and foremost for taking the time to read this rather lengthy poem, Chrissy. In addition, I am very grateful to your for your encouraging comments and exceptional six star rating. But more than winning the contest, great ratings, or anything else that might be involved, I'm just very pleased that you enjoyed the story and presentation.
    Thanks so much again, my friend.
    With gratitude
    ~Dean :)

reply by Chrissy710 on 02-Dec-2015
    well deserved Dean
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Barb Henson
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#8 Ranked Poet
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Excellent, excellent, and excellent.
Very nicely done and definitely a vote from me.
This surpases any I have read and that includes mine.
Very nice


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    First of all, thank you first and foremost for taking the time to read this rather lengthy poem, Barb. In addition, I am very grateful to your for your encouraging comments and exceptional six star rating. But more than winning the contest, great ratings, or anything else that might be involved, I'm just very pleased that you enjoyed the story and presentation.
    Thanks so much again, my friend.
    With gratitude
    ~Dean :)
Comment by
Pearl Edwards
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This is a great story in a poem and you are right the banjo playing does all add to the read. Great artwork all through these mini chapters and it always astounds where you get these ideas from, but obviously they come from way back, when granddad told you tales. Good luck in the contest Dean, loved this one.


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    First of all, thank you first and foremost for taking the time to read this rather lengthy poem, Pearl. In addition, I am very grateful to your for your encouraging comments and exceptional six star rating. But more than winning the contest, great ratings, or anything else that might be involved, I'm just very pleased that you enjoyed the story and presentation.
    Thanks so much again, my friend.
    With gratitude
    ~Dean :)
Comment by
ravenblack
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
When it comes to story poems- note I did not say dark story. A good story is simply that- a good story- no one here does them better. You did capture the backwoods flavor and I could not help but think of old Blue as Ol' Yeller on steroids. The witch's method of spell casting, stitching the flesh, also seems to be a dark take on the binds of marriage. There is one spot where I think to preserve rhythm , in stanza seven instead of vile evils just delete vile. And that little speed bump does nothing to mar my enjoyment of your poem. Excellent!


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
    Thank you first and foremost for taking the time to read this rather lengthy poem, Ed, and for the six star rating too.
    You're absolutely right about that line as well. I've agonized over it since I began working on the piece, over two weeks ago. That's why it helps to have a constructive and experienced outside observer looking in. Sometimes the solution is as simple as eliminating one single word, but you simply can't seem to put your finger on what's wrong. I took care of it, just as you suggested.
    I wish the Competition Compliance Committee felt as strongly as you do concerning my story poems. Rarely do I win, much less even place, in these sorts of site sponsored contests. But I do it because I love to tell stories, as well as write poetry.
    Keep you fingers crossed for me, lol.
    Thanks again, Ed...for everything.
    With gratitude
    ~Dean :}
Comment by
Acquired Taste
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
The banjo forewarns of what is to come. Of course, Deliverance comes immediately to mind. I do know those kinds of stories. Though Bronx-bred, I lived in WV for 8 years - a town of less than 1k spread over many miles. Those people can tell stories that make NY gang wars seem safe. Sitting on a front porch at twilight, nary a sound to be heard and an old man strummin' and simply 'telling' what he remembered happening as a child. This is different than your usual foray into darkness and I like it very much - perhaps because it screams of reality. Good luck in the contest. AT=/


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    First of all, thank you first and foremost for taking the time to read this rather lengthy poem, AT. In addition, I am very grateful to your for your encouraging comments and exceptional six star rating. But more than winning the contest, great ratings, or anything else that might be involved, I'm just very pleased that you enjoyed the story and presentation.
    Thanks so much again, my friend.
    With gratitude
    HUGS!!!
    ~Spooky :)

reply by Acquired Taste on 02-Dec-2015
    Spooky, it is a great poem - the tale just flowed and the descriptions were vivid. You deserve the 6!

reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
    Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it.
    Hopefully the CEC will see it the same way, but I seriously doubt it.
    ~Spooky ;)
Comment by
Phoenix8
 
 
Excellent
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Your poem came to live. It truly was a great example of authentic storytelling. The way it was structured and the rythmn emphasized the terror. I loved it.


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    Thanks for taking the time to read and review my story poem, Phoenix. You comments are deeply appreciated.
    ~Dean :}

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Comment by
justafan
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
I always turn the sound down cause I don't want to get scared shitless...lol.
Another awesome work, Dean.
You pen touches paper and magic happens. It's really amazing!

Always,
Missy


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2015



reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    First of all, thank you first and foremost for taking the time to read this rather lengthy poem, Missy. In addition, I am very grateful to your for your encouraging comments and exceptional six star rating. But more than winning the contest, great ratings, or anything else that might be involved, I'm just very pleased that you enjoyed the story and presentation.
    Thanks so much again, my friend.
    With gratitude and hugs...
    ~Dean :)

reply by justafan on 01-Dec-2015
    I am a sucker for hugs :) ty sugga!

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    :)
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