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As Winter Gathers


Mono rhyme

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May 1
 
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I love the image this poem creates in my mind. Also, I think that you chose just the perfect vocabulary for this poem. Great ending. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this poem.


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
    Hi May,
    Thank you for mentioning the imagery. I had a great picture on this when it first posted, but I think the artist is no longer on FanArt so the artwork is gone.
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Relda Halbert
 
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This is a beautiful poem. It is so full of rich phrasing - I love most, 'frost laces life so brittlely'. Reading it, the last lines resonating with chill bumps so deep they pained my skin.
Great job.
God bless and good luck,
Relda
Wish I had a 'six' to give.


 Comment Written 08-Feb-2016



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
    Thank you for the unexpected review, Relda. I've been away from the site for a while because it's been so busy at work. It was a delightful to surprise to drop by tonight and find your encouraging review waiting for me. I am pleased that it resonated with you and appreciate the kind comments about the phrasing. You have made my day delightful. Thank you. Debi
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Your beautifully written poem of winter's gathering storm is filled with the majesty and danger it brings to all who live within its encroaching shadow. Rhyme scheme (aaaa) and visual imagery make it stand out above the rest.


 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
    Thank you for the lovely review and wonderful six stars! I like that you found that the gathering storm has both majesty and danger. Thank you!
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'Abandoned nest in dying tree
your stark and barren symmetry
evokes a woeful symphony
as winter gathers next to me.'

I love this opening quatrain, Debi. As always, I'm extremely impressed with your poetic ability. Great job!

:) Bev


 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
    Hi Bev,
    Thank you for the exceptional rating and the six stars! I am pleased you liked the poem and especially the opening quatrain. I appreciate your stopping by to read and review. Have a wonderful 2016.
    Debi

reply by Writingfundimension on 11-Jan-2016
    You're very welcome, Debi. :) Bev
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A very lovely winter poem.
I really enjoyed the repetition of the final line.
It was a type of emphasis.
It kind of has a bit of a gothic or ghostly feel. A nice bonus.
Thanks for sharing this special poem to a winter lover.

Drew


 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
    Hi Drew,
    Thank you for the lovely review. I like that you thought this poem had a Gothic or ghostly feel to it. Enjoy the winter!
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This is really nice, debi. I believe this is a squirrel's nest as I have one in a tree in my backyard. When occupied it drives my dogs crazy. Your monorhyme poem (one of my favorite forms) is delightfully well done with expressive imagery. Word choices are dynamic and descriptive. Repetition of the last line unifies the piece.


 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
    Hi Marilyn,
    Thank you for the wonderful six star rating! I like the picture because it reminds me of the tree at the end of my pasture that has a now deserted red tail hawk nest in it. They came back for several years, but the poor tree is suffering because of the drought and didn't put out the leaves needed for them this year. From the house, that poor tree and its abandoned nest look so lonely and barren.

    Thank you for the detailed comments about the word choices, rhyming and the imagery. Mono rhyme is not something I have tried often, and it wasn't my intent when I started, but sometimes a poem has a mind of its own.

    I hope you have a wonderful 2016.
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....as winter gathers next to me...beautiful line , the repetition adding to its beauty.
While reading , I can feel the cold , the frost..
I can hear the mournful moan of silence...
Excellent work . Congrats ...!


 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
    What a lovely compliment--that you can feel the cold and hear the moan. Thank you for an encouraging review. I appreciate you stopping by and sharing your views.
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This is an amazingly smooth poem with interesting and clever rhyme scheme. I loved the first stanza. It was exceptional and drew me in compelling me to read through to the last vividly descriptive lines. Excellent.


 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016
    Thank you for the very kind comments and the wonderful six star rating. I appreciate the encouragement. Thank you for stopping by to read and review.
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Beautiful! Although I appreciate, and sometime write, free verse, I have a special love for poetry with traditional-style rhyme and rhythm. I posted a request to be directed to any such poetry and happily a few poets responded. I found your lovely poem by pure chance, but immediately signed on as a fan. I love it. It flows beautifully and it carries a deep and profound message. Superbly done. Congratulations. I'll look for more of your work.


 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
    What a wonderful review. I am sporadic at visiting because of work, classes, my horse, and other life obligations, so I must have missed your request. Of course, there are some very good poets on the site that write lovely rhymed poems with exacting meter. I learn a lot reading their works.
    Thank you so much for the wonderful compliment of choosing to become a fan. I appreciate it.
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Ridley Williams
 
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Hello, Debi,

I appreciate the solid imagery you bring to the page in this chilling write of winter.
You paint a poignant picture in verse with words like, "stark, barren, deep and crisp."
Also, your excellent color scheme lends to the feeling of the time of year...brrrr is right! Lol.
Nice job with this poem...it took the warmth right out of my room! :)
Hope all is well,
Bill


 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
    Hi Bill,
    I hope the new year it being kind to you and yours. Thank you for the encouraging and specific comments about the writing and formatting. It is nice to know what worked. It was so cold outside I had to come in and huddle up to the computer. Winter has just begun here. I know we need the snow for the water pack, but sometimes I wonder about a warmer clime...
    Hope to read some of your works soon.
    Debi
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