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Scenes: The Musical

Vol 11 in the Scenes from a Marriage series

  16 total reviews 
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CrystieCookie999
 
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I sure like the redo on the lyrics for "Happy Together." This is a pretty good scene. It would probably not fly in Utah,or perhaps only in Salt Lake City, but maybe just over the border. Agnes Moorehead died in 1974, but she was awesome.


 Comment Written 07-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
    Thanks for finding and reviewing this - I remember having fun writing it.
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1.) Mark (who I imagine being portrayed by George Clooney)
--> really? this just goes to show you're a guy. George is o*u*t, out.

2.) Maggie (who I imagine being portrayed by Agnes Moorehead
--> didn't she play elizabeth montgomery's mother in Bewitched? - you're making me think of Bea Arthur for some reason...hmmm...

3.) MARK: I don't think you fully appreciate how it affects the family.
--> PLEASE tell me you've seen the 'Everybody Loves Raymond' episode about Debra's 'time of the month'!! -- Go to Netflix or whatever and SEE IT:
**Season 4, Episode 22 'Bad Moon Rising' -- and that's an
ORDER!

4.) More favorites:
--> Commuting together !
We're separate never!
This marital tether,
Will bind us forever!
In all kinds of weather,
We commute together!

LOOOOOOVED it!

(PS.
Chris Hemsworth, Channing Tatum, Bradley Cooper...)


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016
    I figured George Clooney is about my age, and, like me, is devastatingly handsome, but if you feel that Bradley Cooper is a better fit, I may have to recast. Maggie will still played by Endora from "Bewitched" (even though I understnad that she's dead).

reply by robyn corum on 19-Jan-2016
    PLEASE recast to Bradley Cooper!! George is just..... old. And YOU are certainly not old. You are eternal, forever-young... yada yada.. And -- gotta tell you...still seeing Bea Arthur.
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Loved it...some of my favorite songs. You do have a wicked sense of sarcasm...if Maggie reads these, you might be in big uh-big-uh-big trouble. Can't wait for the next installment...does she really commute with you?


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
    Thanks so much for the review and the six Maggie. Yes, now that Maggie and I both work downtown, we ride the train in together - can't get any writing done on the train these days.
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So very very hilarious. I can't wait to watch it on Broadway, or whatever they have in Chicago. You and your wife must be constantly entertaining each other. Well written, funniest thing I've read in a very long time.


 Comment Written 13-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
    Thanks - someone informed me that Agnes Moorehead is dead, so I'll haveto get someon else to play the part of Maggie
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Of course he is played by George Clooney; no-one else even comes close. But can George sing?

I thought this was very clever, even though I didn't know any of the song tunes referred to (I'm a classical music man, I'm afraid -- what a boring old fart!)

One SPAG. (* * indicates suggested insertions):

'Oops*!* Didn't see you there'


Adrian


 Comment Written 13-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
    Thanks for the review Adrian. Every once in a while, I try to appreciate classical music, but my low class upbringing keeps pulling me back down.
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Oh my god! I wish I had a sixer left! You know that I actually sand through the "hormonal nights"?! For real, out laud! This is genius and made me laugh so much! You should record these with Maggie! Actually, I am so tempted to get my husband to try this with me! How do you even come up with such! I can't wait for the next! Just please make it a Saturday evening release!

Oh, and may I recommend "I got you, babe" as a part of the next one? :)


 Comment Written 13-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
    Actually, I almost put "I Got You Babe" in there, as it is one of our favorite songs. Maybe next time. thanks for the review.
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This is absolutely brilliant. I wasn't sure whether the visions inside my head were from the original musicals or fom my imagination of your script here actually in performance, and it was fantastic. To have a menopausal woman as the leading lady in a broadway musical - No - it just would never catch on. It was a pity it couldn't have been a skit on Les Miserables but the was hardly a decent song anywhere in that one.


 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
    Thanks - my daughter spent most of the Christmas break watching musicals on the TV - I think my brain must have short-circuited and I lost my ability to think in prose.
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Hi, Mark Excellent again with the chronicles of marriage thingie. You have really been hitting buttons with these bits, you know. anything a woman doesn't like is to be harped on about going through the change. (Open the windows in January...it's too hot in here, Mark) LOL. I loved the entire piece, music and all. Bravo! (I blew my sixes already) Sorry. Bob


 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
    Thanks as always Bob - never worry about the sixes. This was one of the more fun ones to write. It is below zero in Chicago today and Maggie was hot on the train ride in this morning. God help me.

reply by Mastery on 12-Jan-2016
    LOL...Been there...done that. You are right. God help you! Bob
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Hahahaha!
This, in my estimation, is one of your funniest of the entire series thus far, Mark. The compilation and altering of some old popular and very famous musical lyrics, the sardonic banter between you and your ever charming better half, Maggie--all coupled with the setting of a musical, like Grease simply added to the hilarity.

Oh... those hormonal nights, indeed, heh-heh-heh...

Excellent writing, and thanks for the first laugh of the day. Here's a sixer for yer efforts...

~Dean :}


 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 12-Jan-2016
    Thanks so much Dean - doesn't seem fair that this fluff piece and your masterpiece on Viet Nam should get the same rating, but I'll just say thanks and let it be.
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Hahahaha!
This, in my estimation, is one of your funniest of the entire series thus far, Mark. The compilation and altering of some old popular and very famous musical lyrics, the sardonic banter between you and your ever charming better half, Maggie--all coupled with the setting of a musical, like Grease simply added to the hilarity.

Oh... those hormonal nights, indeed, heh-heh-heh...

Excellent writing, and thanks for the first laugh of the day. Here's a sixer for yer efforts...

~Dean :}


 Comment Written 12-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
    Thanks Dean - I got a duplicate review from you on this one - I hope that doesn't mean that they deducted two sixes from your store.

reply by Dean Kuch on 13-Jan-2016
    Haha, I doubt it, Mark. I had just one left, and you got it.
    Besides, you can't get blood from a turnip, right, lol?
    ~Dean :}

reply by Anonymous Member on 16-Jan-2016
    Haha, I doubt it, Mark. I had just one left, and you got it.
    Besides, you can't get blood from a turnip, right, lol?
    ~Dean :}
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