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The Conjurer, Part Seven


A Theoretical Life

  37 total reviews 
Comment by
chasennov
 
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A Theoretical Life. The Conjurer, Part Seven.' Well, my uncle always asked me as a kid, "What is Life?" I never knew. He would reply; "A Magazine. How much is it worth? Ten cents." I have never forgotten that. Yes, what is life worth? Very well done, Bev.


 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
    Thanks so much, Chasennov. I'm glad that line stuck with you a bit. It sure did with me--had to get the darned thing worked into the story somehow LoL. Great to hear from you.

    :) Bev

reply by chasennov on 19-Jan-2016
    You are most welcome, Bev.
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Dean Kuch
 
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This was well written and very much worth the wait, Bev.

"Over a period of months, I regressed to being slightly more active than pond scum."----->Heh-heh..., been there, done that, lol. This was a great line, Bev...
The setting with Dr. Morales and the old Indian Shaman, Pasquale, reminded me of a scene or two out of Oliver Stone's film, Natural Born Killers.

This old guy has definitely got powers. The famous mind fu@king Magician, Cris Angel, ain't got nothin' on old Pasquale.

Natural Born Killers: Peyote scene, desert:

Mallory:
It's kinda like "The Twilight Zone"

or something

Old Navajo Indian:

Is that your wife?

Mickey:
Oh, Man:

Old Navajo Indian:
Washington...

Mallory:
Oh, he died?
That was your baby, huh?

Mickey:
Feel the demons here, Mal?

Mallory:
I think we're the demons.

(hissing and rattling)

(howling)


(Navajo chanting)

(rattling)

(Navajo song)


Mickey's dad:

Who you out there fu@kin'?

Mallory:
- Your father.
- Bitch!

(chanting continues)

(mumbling)


Mallory:
I said, shut up!

Mickey's mom:
Come here, you peckerhead.

Mickey:
Don't...don't hit me!
Mom...?

Mickey's mom:
I hate you,
you little asshole!

(moans and screaming)

(gunshots)

Mallory:
This is so bad!
- What did you do, Mickey?


Mickey:
- I didn't mean it!

(Mickey sobbing)

Mallory:
Bad, bad, bad...!

Bad, bad!

Mickey:
Okay...get it together, now.
Come on--!


I can't say why the above scene where Mickey kills the kind old Navajo Indian man in the desert while smoking peyote came to mind, but it did, just the same, Bev.

Again, another fantastic chapter which, with Dr. Morales revelation to the Shaman at the end, leaves the proverbial door wide open to a myriad of possibilities.

Great work!
Dean~~>








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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
    Thanks for the great review and peek into the scene of a cult-classic. I have a girlfriend that says Natural Born Killers is her favorite movie of all time. Not because she liked it, but because it's frikkin' brilliant.

    Don't know why, but shaman's all seem to speak their own language. I think they've reached the place of intended action without a lot of forethought. That's not to say they aren't sober. I think they are just more willing to risk it all.

    This is, without a doubt, the most creative review I've yet received. I think it shows that you really get what this story is about for me. So, a very special thanks, Dean.

    :) Bev


reply by Dean Kuch on 18-Jan-2016
    I'm feelin' it, Bev, and that's a good thing, right?
    You are more than welcome, my friend.
    ~Dean :}

reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
    Yup, sure is, Dean. :)

reply by Anonymous Member on 21-Jan-2016
    I'm feelin' it, Bev, and that's a good thing, right?
    You are more than welcome, my friend.
    ~Dean :}

reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
    Thanks again, Dean.
Comment by
Rosalyne
 
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Hi, Bev.
Wow! Your imagery throughout this chapter is excellent! I felt Dr. Moralis frustration at his lack of endurance, his will to push forward with the tingling fear of doubt of the unknown. You descriptions of the emotions that affected Dr. Moralis, I too felt a part of through your amazing visuals, witnessing the changes of Pasquale. This is fabulous writing in all accounts, from visuals, dialogue and story.
Bye, my friend
Hugs
Rosalyne :)


 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
    Hi, Rosalyne.

    Thanks so much for this very kind and generous review. I really appreciate you sticking with my story, considering the delay in my writing this latest post.

    You've very kindly shared your insights into the technique, etc. and I'm grateful for that. Helps me know what's working outside my own little world LoL.

    Hope you're staying warm. We're getting dumped on with snow. It's like a faucet opened up once Christmas past.

    Thanks again, buddy.

    Love, Bev

reply by Rosalyne on 17-Jan-2016
    Hi, Bev.
    Your story is wonderful and such a fascinating, exciting read!

    We haven't had much snow, but cold weather. Tomorrow we're back in the deep freeze. Like you mentioned, since Christmas the temperatures have been crazy.
    Bye, my friend!
    Hugs
    Rosalyne :)
Comment by
Drew Delaney
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Your writing is exquisite. It's also unique and is style of its own.

Your descriptions are full of depth. This shows me how far I have to go yet to be a distinquished writer.

Keep this up and I'll start knitting. LOL

Drew xx


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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
    Aw, thanks so much, Drew. I'm really honored by your kind insights and encouragement. It's really grand of you to share so generously.

    :) Bev
Comment by
Green Lake Girl
 
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Geez, Bev--this is a brilliant chapter. My eyes were absolutely glued to the screen. This was some of the best writing you've ever produced.

The imagery was impeccable. I felt I was there watching Moralis's every move. The good doctor has a lot to learn. He continually refers to Pasquale and his posse in unflattering and criminal terms. This chapter it was "devious" and "henchmen." How ironic that Moralis shows the behavior of a devious and shallow man, letting his emotions override his intellect at every turn.

Excellent writing; showing your readers the physical superiority of Pasquale which mirrors his intellectual superiority over Moralis.

The sun's heat, the strangeness of the physical surroundings, plus the vortex-like feel of the desert, creates the perfect setting for the supernatural. It's fitting that Moralis experiences mystical events at this juncture. He needs a wake-up call and he's getting it. He finally acquiesces: "I want to remember what it's like to be a man."

You excel at this subject matter, Bev. Your story is riveting, well written and thought provoking. Amazing.






 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
    Hi, Marietta. Thank you so very much for this really awesome review. I appreciate you sticking with me on this story and offering so much encouragement and support. Coming from a writer I much admire, I'm moved by your generosity.

    Hope you're staying warm. We're getting slammed! It's beautiful, but forcing me to stay close to home.

    :) Bev





    :) Bev
Comment by
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Ideasaregems-Dawn
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As always, your chapter is riveting. I wonder sometimes at the story ideas you have, where they come from, what your day-to-day life is really like because honestly, Bev, although what you are writing is so obviously fiction, some of it seems disturbingly real...


 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
    Hi, Dawn. Thanks so much for this very generous and encouraging review. I have lived an unusual life and been exposed to many different elements that definitely get recycled into my writing. The word disturbing, I think, is appropriate for the world of shamans and magicians. Some people also call it otherworldly, but I'm not sure which world they think is the real one.

    :) Bev

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 17-Jan-2016
    Hmmmm...interesting question...which one IS, I wonder...or both, maybe...maybe not...

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
    Yes, Dawn, fascinating indeed. :)
Comment by
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A Universal peace flower I saw by your name. Lillies are such a beautiful and outstanding flower in themselves. I don't think I have read your work till now and with that said, Keep Going. You have a magical key....

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
    Hi, foxangie. Thanks for taking time to read my post. I appreciate your insights and encouragement.
    I agree the Lily deserves its place as a symbol of universal beauty.

    :) Bev
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c_lucas
 
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I do see Carlos rearing up in your post. You are doing a magnificent job with this. I wish I could get the thoughts of Maine outer of my mind, I can't concentrate on this but I will do my best.

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 17-Jan-2016
    Hi, Charlie. I hope you'll feel a bit better with the knowledge I'm getting another chapter of the Paranormal Adventures ready to re-post.

    Thanks so much for the grand review.

    :) Bev
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