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I was conscious of someone saying, "I think we better take her home." ... YOU, Giddy??

a bold, young private asked me out to a party... aha!! Can't wait for the next chapter to find out more. :) :)

Darling Giddy-Gayle,

Just when I think your story couldn't get more fascinating ... it does!

An army nurse ... goodness me. Vietnam. Wow! The picture reminds me of the Cherry Ames nurse series I was quite enamored of as a pre-teen.

Hurry up and write the next chapter, loveliest lady.

Hugs and kisses,

Sonali :)


we all (lent) a hand with the

The female officers(') quarters had originally been

It wasn't long (before?) I was moving around


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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Thank you, darling Sonali. xxx
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Giddy,

I was delighted to find this as a nominee in the BOM contest.

You continue to impress with the telling of your parent's story. The blend of narrative and dialogue tags kept my interest throughout the read. The writing is exceptional because it reflects real lives and told from a first-hand point of view.

Best of luck to you in the booth.

Ray


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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2016
    Thanks for bringing me up-to-date, Bev. I have been away to New Zealand for a holiday and since I have come back just chaos here and the poor old fan story has been neglected. Most of all thank you for your lovely review and those six shiny stars. What a wonderful reviewer you have been for me and help in my writing plus you give me confidence to keep going. I have decided to end this memoir after my marriage so probably only one or two more chapters. My health is deteriorating and I have very little movement left now, life is getting tough and my energy runs out really quickly. I will start book two and hopefully my daughter will finish it because I doubt I will. 'The Pointy End of the Egg,' will be about my journey with MS and bringing up the family. My apology for taking so long to reply to your review, but thank you again for everything, Hugs, Giddy. :) (I will be around for a while yet, LOL)
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What a fascinating look at a slice of your army life. It must have been overwhelming. I would think the hardest part was losing patients. I was very sad when you told about the inscription on the man's ring.
Great picture you have included.


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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2016
    Thank you so much Heidi, for your comments on my story, Giddy
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Hi, Giddy. I haven't seen a post nor heard from you in a long time? where in the world have you been? This is such a great continuation of your story. You are really doing a good job with a lot of this....I was struck by this passage:

"I found the young man in hospital pyjamas with a bandage over his eyes. He was hemmed in, swiping at furniture with a white cane, and turning the air blue with his language." (Good way to put swearing...LOL)

And here: such emotion expressed: "After spending the whole time by his bedside, chatting and feeding him his meals, to be told he had passed away in the night shocked me. I stood still, tears pricking my eyelashes.

Also: "A broken thermometer required a loss and damage report and could result in instant head banging."

All in all, very good job here, Giddy. Bravo! Bob




 Comment Written 08-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
    I have been unwell on quite a few days in the last few weeks, combined with trying to do extra physiotherapy, Bob. The heat is back in Queensland with a vengeance, and I barely cope in the summer now. Besides that, it won't let me review the story chapters you are posting because I have read them before. It is really ages since I posted a chapter of mine also. So we have been missing each other, literally!! It's so nice of you to be concerned, Bob. I really appreciate itl On top of all that, I am working on another book, a book of Japanese poetry to be published with another author. Whinge whinge whinge... forgive me for all that blather. I am especially grateful for the great review and the rating, you spoil me again! Giddy :):)
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A very good story. Your writing is believable. I like dialogue, but realize it is not always called for. This is a good example of where it's not needed.


 Comment Written 07-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
    Hi Thomas, thank you so much for your input, Giddy
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I enjoyed reading this one. I found it quite fascinating too. I didn't see anything that needed fixing or correcting. Great work with this and I look forward to the next chapter. It sounds like being in the Army was quite an experience and a sad one too.


 Comment Written 06-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
    Yes, Sasha, it was a bit of a culture shock, Thanks for reading, Giddy
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Always a joy to read, Giddy. I had no idea you were in the military, and a lieutenant to boot! You did an excellent job keeping the reader right beside you as you tendered care to the patients. And you ended on a hopeful note from the romantic standpoint.

"I'll have that thank you, Sister." I couldn't speak, I handed it over. [I was expecting her to thank him since you didn't have a comma after "that."]




 Comment Written 06-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
    I sincerely thank you for your wonderful input, Jay, and thanks especially for the great six!
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One thing I've learnt to expect from you, Giddy, is an ever changing scene. One minute we're at a rural sheep farm, then a hotel, and now you're in the services.

And like every other element of your life, you have the ability to lift the story beyond banal and infuse it with interesting information and a swag of personal stories. Then it fits together like some clever writer has planned this story to perfection.

This life around soldiers is very specific. The chances you will engage with individuals who take your emotions is easy, but the horror of waking next morning and finding the same person's died would be devastating. I'm guessing you simply became more detached with experience, or you would have left the corps.

The interactions between ranks, and more specifically between gender in the hospital, intrigued me. Some of your actions seemed over the top because they were based on fear, but I wasn't there and party to what the other girls said, so they must have come from somewhere. Of course, the gender thing was another layer of separation. Men then thought themselves clearly superior (and it's not much better in some fields today) and not being a woman, I can't easily feel what you went through. Only imagine.

Despite the adverse elements described, I still got the feeling you were fully aware of the process of adjustment as you encountered new things.

Really enjoyed this, and I look forward to finding out how the date with Private ??? went.


 Comment Written 06-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
    My mother brought me up to be in awe of everybody, Mark. She told me stories of her own girlhood about having to obey the bosses and she thought doctors were Gods. From childhood I was intimidated by doctors, dentists, just about everybody. In the Army, I was terrified of what I didn't know. Nevertheless my DNA dictated a powerful yearning for variety in my life. I always enjoy reading your remarks, because they add so much to my knowledge of writing, Giddy :)
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I had no idea you were an Army nurse, Giddy. To give comfort to the trauma patient is a special calling. One must compartmentalize emotions to survive it whole. Thank you for serving those who were injured while serving your country. :) Nancy


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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
    Gosh, what lovely comments, Nancy. I learnt a lot in the Army, though I never got to go to Vietnam. Many thanks, Giddy
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What a distinguished rank to start with as first lieutenant--and I like your uniform, veil and all! I admired your opening the chapter with the quote, and your description of being "a stranger in a strange world" plus the agony of all the deaths on your watch. You left us with great, romantic expectations for the next chapter... Cheers- Joan


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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
    Many thanks for your fruitful input, Joan. I am stoked by your rewarding me a six, Giddy :))
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