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Hey, Craig,
I read through this flash fiction. I never actually saw psycho, and yet I knew this was the prequel to that story. Nice job with capturing the essence. I got the mix of creepy and the three main characters. The homemade Apple Charlotte went a little over my head, I figure it's a desert and play on words.
His eyes refocused and he saw a beautiful woman standing in nothing but her underwear[,] and his mother's pearl inlaid gold necklace. (suggest deleting this comma)
I feel pretty useless in my review, here, I didn't see anything sticking out to change save for that comma that I have a feeling was separating a pair... like peanut butter and jelly....
So I mostly just enjoyed the reading of it. I was amused by the screaming Charlotte with the added, you scared me, a classic staple of the horror genre, and that horror in particular, a great screamer.
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2016 |
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
Thanks, Turtle. I take it as a compliment that you were able to guess which movie without having seen it. Apple Charlotte is indeed a dessert, I wanted to imply something gruesome without actually saying it.
I think you must have opened this a long time ago, as the comma has been gone for days - I must have imagined you picking me up on it :)
Try and watch Psycho some time if you can, you'll probably be amused at what used to make people scream. We are a bit desensitized these days, I think :)
Much appreciated, Craig
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reply by --Turtle. on 14-Apr-2016
That's how behind I am, I'll start a review, and it will take me two days to press save. Partially because I can only review things a few minutes at a time, especially these last few weeks. All I know is this girl needs a vacation from work and home... her brain is mush.
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C'mon, Craig, that's too easy. It's from Alfred Hitchcock's Psycho. The film that made all women start showering with their clothes on for about a year after it was released in 1960. That also happens to be the year that I was born, so I'd imagine I was all wet, even way back then.
"Now that her heart had almost descended back into her chest cavity, Charlotte managed a smile.".............Funny, Craig. That's one unique way of saying Charlotte was scared shitless, heh-heh...
This s a ghoulishly good piece of flash horror fiction.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck...
~Dean
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2016 |
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
I wanted to find a picture that wouldn't help make it too easy. Alas, I'm not sure I pulled it off.
I read somewhere that the blood in the Psycho shower scene was actually chocolate sauce - thank God for black and white.
Thanks for the fun review, Dean.
Craig
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reply by Dean Kuch on 09-Apr-2016
Yep, Hershey's Chocolate Syrup to be exact, Craig.
Of course, I'm a big horror aficionado. If I had gotten this wrong, the horror gods would have risen up from the abyss and eaten my soul.
Good luck...
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