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Intelligently thought of and expressed. I would agree on most of what you say but question your insistence that Utopia is achievable or even ultimately desirable. Until the ego is completely transcended we will never achieve a Utopia on Earth The viewpoint of the ego is limited unless completely transcended. Ultimate Enlightenment should be the goal. Buddhism has many branches and conflicting viewpoints. Who is your Master? Do you think that you need one?


 Comment Written 30-Mar-2020



reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
    Once transcended, Infinity and Eternity unite in the HERE and NOW. We have eternity to modify our self-created universe. Thanks for the great review....John

reply by Carl DeVere on 30-Mar-2020
    Once transcended that is...it may take an Eternity. Agree heartily with your first sentence. But what about this "self-created" business?

reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
    Our universe is the view we discern when looking in the mirror of our mind. We "con-template" our understanding of our experience.

reply by Carl DeVere on 02-Apr-2020
    Pretty hip John. I take it that you are your own master. It's great writing though--no doubt.
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Wow! just Wow! I can't yet begin to describe how much I have been affected by reading this-you have hit so many nerves, while making so much sense, and I know I will re-read this many times over. Your presentation is simple and so direct, yet you provoke both emotion and understanding at the same time. This "container" will definitely look for more from you! Very enjoyable!

All the Best!

Phil


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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
    Many thanks....John
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Your perspective is spot on! A machine of any kind is only "intelligent" because it has been manipulated with information by a human. Many of your observations reflect how we all have forgotten who we really are, but there is hope that the simplicity in remembering is all about removing the trash we have been fed­?ą░


 Comment Written 01-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
    Many thanks for your kind words....John
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Hi there, It's a very interesting piece and analysis of our mind and what to do with it. But I think there is a danger in all this. If you favour that we give up our individuality and our beliefs to become a uniform mass, I totally disagree with you. It's a very dangerous path to go down. A path that has been tried and been defeated, thank God. And I'm not religious. All best. Ulla:)))


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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
    There's more. Thank yoy...John
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I think its a well written essay, and that makes it even more scary. Do you know who you sound like? The Nazis. All this description of human experience in machine like terms is frightening. Also, what kind of an idea is the elimination of religion, and the declaration that Earth is our mother? Where is freedom in all of this? The building of Utopia sounds great; but not at the cost of human emotions and the creation of a robot society dependent on dictatorship. Why should hard working people who worked hard to build their own companies give more than half of what they earned to support lazy bums who don't want to work? What you sow, you reap. The destruction of individual cultures in favor a globalized common denominator I can't support. estory


 Comment Written 01-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
    The ego is one tough nut to crack. Thanks for your review....John
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Very well written. For a technically based work, it's surprisingly easy to follow! I have some background in IT, so that may color my opinion here, but I followed it easily. Loved the Seven Detours - construction zones on our path to enlightenment. Nicely said. Altogether very readable and effective.


 Comment Written 01-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
    Thank you much...John
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Hello Cogitator,
It's a nice piece of Commentary and Philosophy Non-Fiction beautifully depicting its theme.
Artificial Intelligence,, Ignorance, Self-made prisons, Mature Humans, Positive and Negative Traits of humans, and how we can live in concert with mother Earth are transparently described.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Educative as well as Interesting.
A little long, but LAUDABLE ATTEMPT INDEED!


 Comment Written 31-May-2019



reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
    Many Thanks...John

reply by RPSaxena on 06-Jun-2019
    Cogitator, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
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Your essay was very intriguing and took me back to college introduction classes in Philosophy, Psychology, Arts and Humanity, Engineering, and a sloo of others. A well-done piece.


 Comment Written 29-May-2019



reply by the author on 29-May-2019
    Many thanks. ..John

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Very interesting. Many good points, and also some things I don't agree with, but that's fine. Facing facts is where too many people, even those in power, fail miserably these days. People see opinions and feelings as facts, and they'll argue till you scream that their "truths" are as good as those proven by hard evidence. We all known the seven deadly sins as "bad" for humans, but this is the first time I've seen a list of "good" traits that help us all. Too bad most won't give them a try--if they could only see what they're missing! :)


 Comment Written 29-May-2019



reply by the author on 29-May-2019
    Many thanks. ..John
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I think you did a really terrific job explaining intelligence and our wrong perception of it. Your piece was very informative and should be submitted to a literary journal or a university. It's the kind of essay that has true value. Very well done!!


 Comment Written 29-May-2019



reply by the author on 29-May-2019
    Many thanks. John
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