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Blue and Yellow Lunch


Games they play

  38 total reviews 
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Lisa Heath
 
 
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THE REVIEWER FEELS PLAYING TOO MANY VIDEO GAMES: WHILE CREaTING MANUAL DEXTERITY ON A KEYBOARD OR ON A WIFI GAME MAY BE INTERESTING< I myself or some of my family may not want to participate a little too frequently in them, though. It is a good article all but deer hunting. I like to eat deer meat, I just quietly enjoy seeing them graze and run gracefully with their young. Lisa Heath


 Comment Written 20-Dec-2018



reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
    Thank you for your review, Lisa.
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Lucian Carter
 
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Fascinating tale. Layers within layers; games within games. I can see why this reached All Time Best. I'd be content not knowing if I were in their boat too. Once in a while I like to dig in the archive for gems like this. I'm glad I found it.


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
    Thank you or your review, Lucian.
    :) ellen
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Day Z Chayn
 
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When I was a child
i used to think
People really didn't
Drive their cars.

Instead, it seemed that
if you looked up past the clouds
an invisible child's gargantuan hand
ought to reach down from the sky
in order to push the cars along

Ever grateful,
Shane




 Comment Written 04-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Shane.
    :) ellen
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Father Flaps
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Hi Ellie
I'm late getting to your story, but I've been so busy with other things these days. Writing is taking a back seat, I'm afraid.
When I began reading this, I said to myself "Wow! She's writing me that hunting scene I suggested!" ... and right away I began watching for aliens.
But you have such a wild imagination, I should have known better. You gave me aliens alright, yellow and blue variety, joy-sticking it to ignorant earthlings.
You touch on so many subjects in this. Of course, there's that now-familiar question, "Are we alone?" And if there are aliens, what do they do in their spare time? Do they waste their waking hours playing mindless video games? Surely they don't spend ALL their lives abducting earthlings... implants, controllers... do you suppose they do it for their own reality games? Are aliens behind all our wars, riots, illegal drugs, etc? That makes sense. Surely we can't be as stupid as we seem to be in recent years. I mean, I'm a Canadian. But it worries me that people will actually vote for Mr. Trump as their future President of the United States. Maybe that's what aliens want, eh? It's like watching a soap opera. I have to give my head a shake!
You slip into space so easily, to that alien civilization so many light years away. It wasn't what I had in mind. But then, you are such an amazing writer. You take us where we don't expect. Although...maybe this is just the alien outpost on the other side of the moon, and not far away at all. They need some sort of relaxation, don't they, after a hard day's night of abductions and harassing potato farmers in Idaho?
After I read this, I thought of the 2014 movie I watched earlier in the evening... "Interstellar" starring Matthew McConaughey, Anne Hathaway, John Lithgow, Ellen Burstyn, Michael Caine, and Matt Damon. It left me questioning what is real in the universe. What happens when we die? Where is heaven? How many dimensions are out there in space? Time... how do we spend it? How much time do we waste? I sit in the lunch room at the drug store, for example. In walks a pharmacist, in seconds playing with her hand-held touch screen. No words exchanged. A cashier enters for her break... again, the little screen is popped. The stores clerk comes in and it's the very same thing. No talking. Heads down... no wonder nobody believes there are aliens out there. They're all looking down at their "smart" phones. I sure don't want to be manipulated by some alien kid on the far side of the moon! Perhaps aliens are behind smart phones! Maybe it's their way of contacting their abductees.
I'm rambling.
Anyway, great story, Ellie. You have a wonderful imagination! Thanks for giving me what I asked for, and more.
There was only one spot, a run-on sentence...
"There was an audible warning snort/// then a whitetail flashed, and the sound of hooves sped deep into the forest."
I took the dog for a walk last night, after that movie, but before I tuned into FS... the sky looked strange. The half moon had a star on either side of it, and was smudged somehow, mustard-yellow, old world cheese. Clouds moved in, and all that was left was a glow. I started to look around for aliens in the bushes...

Big Hugs,
Kimbob


 Comment Written 15-May-2016



reply by the author on 29-May-2016
    Thank you so much, Kimbob, for the glowing review. I'm glad you liked the story.

    Your walk with the dog and seeing the mustard-yellow glow in the clouds sounds very errie.

    I hope you wife is doing better. It's a terrible time when a loved one is sick.

    :) e xxx
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I'm not into much sci-fi, Ellen, but this was cute. I could picture what was happening real easy. I loved the ending. You have a great imagination. Keep up the good work. Miss Sally


 Comment Written 14-May-2016



reply by the author on 29-May-2016
    Thank you, Miss Sally. It is so good to hear from you.
    I'm glad this wasn't too scary. I tried to make if fun.

    :) ellen
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Hi, Ellen. Your writing has not changed...still engaging and full of great dia;logue and images...like here: "Art put down his controller and nudged his friend. "We better go, or your mom'll do like she did last time--ground you."

And: "Overhearing a blip here and there, Mom interrupted. "Children, have you been playing your father's adult games again?"
Lots of imagination in this piece.

Good job, my friend. good to have you back.


 Comment Written 13-May-2016



reply by the author on 29-May-2016
    Thank you, Bob.
    You always pull out the best likes of dialogue to let me know that I'm still capable.

    Congrats on all you newly published work.

    :) ellen xx
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mfowler
 
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This is 'The Truman Show' gone intergalactic and on-line. The opening sequence hooks the reader with its suggestion of a buddy story and hunting the scenario. But, just as quickly you take us into the world of the gamer kids who turn out to be animations living out the lives of gamer kids. Loved the concept of the perfect Mommy serving up healthy meals that raised their energy levels. That the hunters could even discuss the poor shooting control after being left on pause should have given me a clue as to the complexity of the plot. As the faux boys move to another room to play inappropriate games on a computer game they're in, it's pretty obvious that their must be some spotty faced humans behind it all. Sure enough the final paragraph reveals that gamers are controlling the lives of the inhabitants of the blue planet. Creative stories like this are a blessing to readers like me on FS. They show the possibilities that good writers could follow if they trusted their imagination. This is such a good flash fiction. Constant action and revelation of the plot via excellent dialogue (one of your great strengths) and description keep the reader on song from go to whoa. It's great to read your work again.


 Comment Written 13-May-2016



reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Thank you so much, Mark. I really enjoyed your enthusiastic review and appreciate the six stars as well.
    It's fun when stories like this spew onto the page. haha I can't seem to type fast enough when they do.
    I'm sure you've been there.

    :) ellen



reply by mfowler on 13-May-2016
    Know that feeling well, Ellen. In the moment, it's electric, and when you read them back you can't remember where it all came from. If the critics like it, that's cream on the cake. Enjoy the cream.

reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    I never feel like I wrote whatever shows up on the page. haha
    Maybe it actually was one of those little guys using his controller. haha
Comment by
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YAY! WRITE MORE!
I love how perfectly you slipped into this. Yeah. I felt like I was getting a neck rub or something. LOL Great stuff and delivered so smoothly and I think you know something you're not telling us. This is non-fiction, yes?
Great dialogue, it helped so much that the creatures felt real. That made the flawed results, US, seem logical too. If these were a race of geniuses they wouldn't have games and pastimes that produced our messed up world. Loved this. I hope you write more. You're good at this writing stuff. mikey


 Comment Written 12-May-2016



reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Hey, Mikey.
    How ya doin' out there in cyber land?
    Thanks for enjoying another of my brain-farts.
    I like writing 'stuff'. haha

    :)e

reply by michaelcahill on 13-May-2016
    This was mad cool stuff. It would make a cool TV show or something. :))

reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Twilight Zone ...
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Cumbrianlass
 
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Pretty cool. You have a knack of coming at things from the other side, exploring fresh angles. So clever and very creative. This hi-tech world with its manipulated inhabitants might well exist. Who knows how much of our world is real? I've seen the Matrix. Not literally - the movie! :)

Really well done, Ellen. Very you - you're one of the most unique writers on here.

It's not controlling my thoughts that is the issue, it's controlling my mouth. LOL!

Av



 Comment Written 12-May-2016



reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Thank you, Av.
    Unique? or Crazy? haha

    Come now. Our world his real ... I hope.

    :) e
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I was kind of hoping the hunters would turn on each other and the deer would keep on living in the forest. What an interesting and creative story, it's really fascinating. For a minute there I thought maybe the parents were Mr. and Mrs. God, and their kids were acting up.
Carol


 Comment Written 12-May-2016



reply by the author on 12-May-2016
    I like your possibility-- God's kids. It fits the scenario.
    I hope you are well, Carol.
    I'll check in on one of your poems real soon.

    Thank you so much for your review.

    :) ellen

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