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Games they play

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Yes, I sometimes feel I'm not in control of my thoughts..... lol I analyze too much what's going on in my mind.............. anyway, this is well written, have a nice day.


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reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Thank you, candybarr. I loved your comments.

    :) ellen
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Imagine my joy and elation when I went to my inbox and saw a new posting from you, Ellen. You were always one of my favorite writers here at good Old FanStory. I've truly missed reading your work.

In no time, the men saw a six-point buck and his three does grazing in an open field. They looked at each other, smiled, crouched and cocked their rifles.........Every deer hunter's dream realized here, in these lines, lol...

The sound of rifle fire blasted from the speaker system, and the virtual-deer scattered into the distance on the wall-based screen. All escaped, except the buck that lay quivering, bleeding in the foreground..........Okay, so it's every virtual hunting gamer's dream as well, or so it seems...

They grabbed the forbidden, adult games, swiftly eminated to Art's, and eased through the plasma barrier into Art's room where Max accessed the Galactic Communication Network. White light flashed, and the screen pooled with color. "We're connected."
.........Ya know, "e", it does my failing heart good to know that we, mankind, as a species, are not the only one's in the Galactic Equation of things who enjoys a little pornography every now and again. It's truly what they say.

We are NOT ALONE!

Great story, within a story, within a Galaxy, far, far away.

Good writing, as usual, Ellen.
Now, if you'll excuse me, it seems I have a sudden urge to Play Gods Of Warcraft...heh-heh...
~Dean  photo baby-alien-walking1_zps3f3d961a.gif


 Comment Written 11-May-2016



reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    This poor little gray has been treading in place for two days now. I don't want to answer this review, because I've grown fond of him. I'll miss his incessant attempt to get somewhere. Maybe, when I release him, he'll get there. Ya think? Maybe?
    Thank you, Dean, for loaning him to me.
    I hope to see him again ...

    Thank you for the review, too.

    :) e

reply by Dean Kuch on 13-May-2016
    Hahaha, you're welcome, Ellen.
    He does look a might peaked now that you mention it.
    Poor little feller, LOL...
    ~Dean :)

reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Poor little gray. I bet he's taking a loooong nap. haha
    I wore the fella out. Bad, inconsiderate human!!

    :) e

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The world of imagination
Gone into the margin
Without the sight of the screen
Never know anything

When will the time come
For the world to realize
That a love of nature numb
The wonder of a walk fun


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reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Thank you, dan, for the clever poetic review.

    :) ellen
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This has a most great and unique title that grasps hold of the reader and places them in your creative story. It is interesting because of the many things that are used daily in the discriptive work.


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reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Thank you, foxangie 13.
    :) e
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This really has a message to it. Are we being controlled by people beyond our knowledge? Frightening idea. Very well written and very interesting, How sad that the kids and their parents are so consumed with video games. Very well done.
Joyce 05-11-16


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reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Thank you, Joyce, for such nice comments.

    :) ellen
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Rod Serling would be proud. I can't say I caught all the nuances--but I still have a flip phone.

I've often wondered if we're some version of marionettes (see how high-tech I am?) But essentially, this is the same idea.

You baffled me with techno-speak, but I'm used to that.

You're a far cry from Appalachia now, Ellen.

Peace, Lee


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reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Yep, that was a long time ago. I often wonder how things are going in Pinebluff ...

    Thank you so much for the the sixer.

    :) ellen xx
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The kids of tomorrow will be brain dead. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Thank you, Charlie.

    :) ellen
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Hi there,

A good little piece this that brought to mind the ending of King's 'The Dome'. Manipulated by alien gamers unwittingly and unknowingly. Well written and fun.

All the best
G

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016
    Hi, g.
    I haven't read 'The Dome'. Really should catch up on King. He's so prolific I can't keep up. haha

    Thank you for reviewing and enjoying this flash fiction.


    :) e
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