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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Cool Water"

The lady's escape becomes a countrywide search

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Ahaaa the picture is now better painted. It is an interesting dilemma the Lady does present. I can envision her husband being angry and suspicious of his wife's actions and that of any man who finds her. Again great descriptions, good plot line. Good reading, thank you.


 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016



reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
    Thank you for your kind words. Do stop by again soon. Catherin

reply by aryr on 06-Jun-2016
    you are very welcome.
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I really like this. You have really good characters and have pulled me into your story. I now, need to know what happens to Lady Leno really and Lord Jonathan...And, of course, I'm watching for a romance between the two.

Well done. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 03-Jun-2016



reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
    Thank you for your very kind words and excellent rating. Do stop by again soon. Catherin

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country ranch writer
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where he says standing with this maid you need to keep his words separate from hers so people know who is talking okay it is his thoughts


 Comment Written 03-Jun-2016



reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
    Thank you for your review, your suggestion will be corrected. Catherin
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tankard of mead(,) bows gallant(ly) and says, "Please, My Lady."
The lady is distraught I must help her. Not too many know of this cabin my private retreat.(This should either be italicized or in single quote marks.)
back against (the?) rock wall
Hesitant I allow him to (I would suggest a comma after hesitant, or use the word hesitantly
Lord Darwin.(?) Aware
An elegantly writing story


 Comment Written 03-Jun-2016



reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
    Thank you for your informative review. I look forward to looking to these corrections. Catherin
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