Very good reading. I appreciate the detailed descriptions you provide throughout. It has some interesting twists and turns to it. There is a good level of suspense and by leaving it open ended for the next chapter a high level of mystery. The suspense compels the reader to keep going, wanting to know what the next sentence will reveal. Good writing, good reading, thank you.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
Thank you for your 'excellent' rating and your kind words. Do stop by again soon. Catherin
This is a very good story. I enjoy the plot. You have described the settings and the people nicely. However, there were a number of spelling and grammatical errors. Examples:
Paragraph 9 - PLACE not PLACES
Paragraph 11 - ON not OWN
Paragraph 27 - COUNTENANCE not CONTINENCE
Paragraph 30 - CURTSIES not COURTESIES
Paragraph 31 - period after Fantasia. He
Paragraph 32 - period after Lord. She
Do a good edit and this will be great. I will look forward to your next installment.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
Thank you for your informative review. The suggested corrections will be made.