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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Return to Devonshire Castle"

The lady's escape becomes a countrywide search

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create4christ
 
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This is very good, as always. Your characters are well fleshed out...my favorite being Lord Jonathan. For some reason, it seems that Darwin has set a trap for Jonathan...You have definitely reeled me into your story. Well done.

Anxious for your next chapter. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016



reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
    Thank you for your 'excellent' rating and your kind words. Do stop by again.
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Serendipity!
 
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Perhaps I am the only one who doesn't quite know what you are meaning here: Pausing when Lara gasps in shock at her lady's trial touching her hand in comfort I continue, "She refused to return to the Castle Black Shadow."
We meet few Travelers.(No need to capitalize)
and continues to Devon Shire. (to avoid repetition could you use 'continue on our way'
"Sire (,) he is asleep in the hay loft."
Good luck!


 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016



reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
    Serendipity, Your comments are greatly appreciated. I will review your critic of the noted items. Please tell me what you like about the work in additionn to the above critic.
    Thank you! Do stop by again.

reply by Serendipity! on 07-Jun-2016
    It's a charming story. I like the setting a lot.
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