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The Devil's Skin


Stranger danger...

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This is a sad world when it comes to protecting our children. An innocent child is one thing that I would gladly go to prison for. They cannot protect themselves and don't have the means to get out of the situation. I could think of many ghoulish things to do to these perverted freaks that destroy our children. These are deep dark words perfectly written about a deep dark subject. The aabb rhyme makes easy smooth read. I don't know where you got the artwork, but it is perfect for the message. The scarred child and the lurking demon hiding in wait for his next victim is the perfect presentation. Zombies, vampires and goons can't even begin to compare to these MONSTERS. The fifth stanza gets my goat too. People are quick to scream forgiveness and I'm all about forgiveness but not in this case. I agree with on this, if it were their child, they wouldn't be so quick to forgive. Great message Dean.


 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks for reading and commenting, Eric.
    I appreciate it, as always.
    ~Dean
Comment by
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Love this! A powerful and stark reminder that the monsters we feared in childhood are nothing in comparison to the real monsters who walk among us.
The tension builds up well, questioning those who forgive and clearly stating your stance.
Very impressed!


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for reading my work, RChapman. Your kind comments are very much appreciated..
    We have become far too politically correct to torment poor pedophiles.
    According to justice, they have rights too.
    As far as I'm concerned, their rights to justice ended they day they placed their filthy hands on a child.
    Thank you for giving this a chance, despite the rather unsettling artwork.
    Again, I appreciate your comments and very generous six stars very much.
    Take care, and thanks again for reading.
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Creative piece detailing interesting aspects which darken the hearts of man, evil inside self and others with descriptive insights. Strong grasping statements intriguing in their conveyances with slamming conclusion: in my opinion.


 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for reading, TPAC.
    We have become far too politically correct in this country in an attempt at avoiding tormenting poor pedophiles.
    According to justice, they have rights too.
    As far as I'm concerned, their rights to justice ended they day they placed their filthy hands on a child.
    Thank you for giving this a chance, despite the rather unsettling artwork.
    I appreciate your comments and very generous six stars very much.
    Take care, and thanks again for reading.
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A daring, brilliantly written poem with a deep and disturbing theme.

Your internal rhyme and vibrant metre keep the verses flowing with great verve. The choice of language is wonderful for the theme and I think your use of alliteration is superb: Oh, how I long to thrill the throngs with poetic flights of fancy. ... had me from the start.

Your aversion to the perverted is real and sustained.
Monsters reside deep down inside of very horrid hosts.
Sick in the head, inciting dread-- they scare us all the most. ... what else can you say?

The stats and notes add further weight to your stance. I know we're ask to forgive no matter what, but it's the soul that might well be what we must attend to, but accepting the perversion or allowing the innocent to be exposed isn't what 'loving your neighbour' means.

A hard topic covered with passion and poetic skill.


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks for reading and commenting, Mark.
    I appreciate it, as always.
    ~Dean
Comment by
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Jacqueline M Franklin
 
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Hi, Dean

= Interesting how everyone has their own favorite genre they enjoy writing.
= Horror is definitely your forte, my friend. You take it to a new level.
= Make peeps like me, who are not into it--enjoy it anyway. That is a real gift.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings ... Jax
<> Published as ... Jacqueline M Franklin


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks for taking a gander, Jax.
    Have a wonderful week.
    Dean
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Hi Dean

This is a powerful poem about a very uncomfortable topic and I must say you have handled it just right with your careful rhyme and imagery. Thanks for sharing this. R


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks for much for the read & review.
    ~Dean
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Damned is the soul who takes advantage of the purest of innocence. Nauseating facts you have delivered here Dean. Even the plaques on their doors will not stop them. Masterfully crafted as usual.
God bless!
Steve


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Thanks for reading, Steve.
    ~Dean
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I could not agree more with your authors notes as child abuse is unthinkable. You poem as always inspires me Dean, so very well done.


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for reading, Don.
    I feel we have become far too politically correct in this country for fear we may torment a poor pedophile.
    According to justice, they have rights too.
    As far as I'm concerned, their rights to justice ended they day they placed their filthy hands on a child.
    Thank you for giving this a chance, despite the rather unsettling artwork.
    I appreciate your comments and very generous six stars very much.
    Take care, and thanks again for reading.
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Comment by
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Bill Bishop
 
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Edgar Allen Poe, would have said "YO" to this one, Dean. Very well written, my friend. Respectfully, Bill (Junglefighter)


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for reading, Bill.
    I feel we have become far too politically correct in this country for fear we may torment a poor pedophile.
    According to justice, they have rights too.
    As far as I'm concerned, their rights to justice ended they day they placed their filthy hands on a child.
    Thank you for giving this a chance, despite the rather unsettling artwork.
    I appreciate your comments and very generous six stars very much.
    Take care, and thanks again for reading.
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reply by Commando on 29-Aug-2016
    Reading your work, "is always an honor," Dean." And the enjoyment of it all, "is fulfilling." I'm less diplomatic than you, my friend. I say, "PISS ON THEIR RIGHTS!" During my Commando duties, I would have shot the bastards for target practice. And still will, if you'll buy me some ammo. Of course I'm not cheap, you know? It's that the Fed's busted up my moonshine still in the Smokes' and I'm low on cash. By the way, your artwork is very creative. Keep up the good work...and "God bless!" Respectfully, Bill

reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    I'd like to do the same thing to 'em, Bill, believe me.
    Thanks again, my friend.
    ~Dean
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Jesus, Dean, without the horror background sounds this would scare the sh*t out of me - I am glad I finally starting reading before ti's close to bedtime for a change. Now maybe I can read something light to take my mind off of this frightening poem!

Damn, it won't stop either, and I am trying to focus on meter - the presentation is fantastic, mind you, the alliteration is great, as always, and the rhyme and internal rhyme are good too - but enjambment seems a bit difficult, and it might have something to do with the meter. The stress is on the wrong syllable in a few places (like here - "Zombies are cool...") but the lines are also varying lengths...nothing really wrong with that if it works. I wish I could be more helpful...!


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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    What you've said is fine, Dawn.
    If it was frightening, then I've gotten the message across which I'd hoped to convey.
    Those who molest, torture, and abuse children--they are the monsters we all need to be frightened of.
    Thanks for the R&R.
    ~Dean
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